Hi, ScarredSecrets!
This is a unique piece of poetry, I liked it much. The pain engraved was felt in each and every line.
We do feel that when we are depressed we really mean what we say. The decisions taken at that time matter to us more and feel it is the final call for the problem.
These following lines were so moving:
“I don’t want to talk about it” really means
“I need to talk about it or I’ll fade”
“Leave me alone” really means
“Don’t Leave I need you to be my aid”
“Don’t touch me,” really means
“Hold me tight and never let go,”
“I’m doing better,” really means
“I’m slowly dying and they don’t even know,”
“I will live,” really means,
“I don’t want to live but I have to,
The pain in us blinds our thinking as well as the words we promise. They just die in air, but all we needed was the support.
It gets irritated when people wants to talk, we want to be all alone. All one needs is peace.
But then we feel lonely, we search for the cozy arms to rely on, we need solace by spending time with our beloved.
This is a tricky feel,right. It was well carried out in your poem.
The highlight of the poem was these lines:
[/quote]There you have it
My vocabulary
There you have it
My very own dictionary[/quote]
The worst and most dangerous feel is getting tangled in your own rope of thoughts, it does feel miserable. This is a perfect lament, many people relate to it.
Well, the one who wins is the one who breaks his/her own shackle.
I see the problem faced by the speaker, and could figure out the message said.
Overall, it was a perfect lament with good imagination, emotion(well, that was so strongly felt) portrayal of thoughts well established.
was totally into it.
Great job! Looking forward for more of your works.
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