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I wanted to say thank you for the like in the form of a review.
I, too, write poetry.
Have been doing so for many moons.
So here I go;

Your layout is a good one to go with for this type of poem.
Though, you have to make use of comma's(,) and periods(.).
Sometimes even semi-colins(;) when adding a new thought.
Its all about flow, man/woman. All about flow ~

"Hello" is a nice abrupt beginning to your poem.
It suits it well, and I think it may be what captured me, personally.
Though, after "Hello" I find, there should be a comma.
You're going into another line; You are introducing yourself.
When doing so, you must connect the thought.
Comma's help us do that :3

For the third line, "Pass an year and I was gone", 'an' should just be 'a'.
When reading this aloud I couldn't get over how it just killed the flow of this otherwise beautiful poem.
Same goes with the sixth line. Also, for the sixth line, a semi-colin would go nicely.
"Got depressed as no one cried" is a new thought. Sure, it has something to do with you dieing, but its how you felt. Not what went down (This is just my personal view - perhaps I'm spewing nonsense)

With the last two lines, I think you mixed it up a bit.
When reading it outloud, I found that the rest of the poem had a calm rythum up until this very last point.
Perhaps if you tried changing the lines around and using your transitional wording in this way, it would come off better:
"Though I would love to see the sunrise,
I still lie as a corpse tonight."

Eh ?
Welp ! This is Brie-Kun being a critic
Hope I wasn't harsh or anything.
(Like I said, I might be spewing a bunch of nonsense)
But I did like your poem
Keep up the good work !
Continue to be this creative, and SarcastiC c; <3