Hey Sarah!
Very inspirational piece. I just found a couple things I would change if it was me. In the second stanza, I would change "the beauty of the dewy morning rose," to "the beauty of a dewy morning rose". I think that just helps make it more clear as at first it took me a second to understand your meaning. And in the third stanza I would replace "more than the everyday life," to "more than a monotonous existence,". That's just my opinion, but I think it adds variety. Great job. Keep writing!
groganbabygirl
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