Very nice!!! I don't know if I'll be able to critisize anything in this poem... GAH!!! Can't...find....anythin to say bad things about! Oh, wait, I found something, although it really is teeny tiny...
Giving me pains
I think that it would sound a little better if you took the "s" of the end, making pains pain. Also, the ryhming in the second stanza was a little forced. Besides that, this poem is perfect!
p.s. The title is a little long...
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