Published September 20, 2012
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Interesting poem; it definitely has a unique edge. I actually like the way you made some lines bold and kept this poem sharp. Typically it's a style I don't fall in love with, but this was a good poem. The message is deep and introspective, and while I'm trying to pull words out of thin air right now and muster up some criticism, I think that this was a solid poem. My one suggestion might be to not put the word "Free" in its own line. I would write "Or do you want to be free?" in bold - it will give it all the impact that it needs, and might even increase that final darker edge on the words.
In any case, this was a good poem! Keep writing!