HG

I really like this but I agree with Mesh and Jack, thoguh. And this sentence right here:

"The girl, slightly annoyed, puts asider her needle and sampler."

I think you ment:

"The girl, slightly annoyed, puts aside her needle and sampler."

And I think you were a little TOO fast paced, you know with switching the perspectives.
And the thing the doctar did to the boy ROLF!!!!! I always knew those doctars were out to get you....

teehee.

SAM! yay! this was very good. aye. I like the lack of paragraphs. makes this very easy to read.

Do agree with Jack, however. Flesh it out more! especially torwards the end, unless you change it from the switching POV to something more continous.

*hoards cupcakes* MINEEEEEEE!!!

And thanks. The friggin' little whatchamacallit is flattered.

I likey this one very muchly!

Your dialogue always holds a wealth of description, which fascinates me. How the crap do you do that, girl?! Ugh. If you don't stop writing this well I think I might steal all the cupcakes away from you, because you're writing way to well to be only twelve. Or fifteen. Or whatever age. It's too good.

You friggin' .... little.... *can't think of a sufficient insult* Augh!!!

Hehe...true...very true.

lmao that was mean what the doc did to the boy LMAO but it was so funny...
it's ture
the men u love ur daddy'll kill (applies to me)

One point - Lord Nelson had his arm cut off and still became one of Britain's greatest naval heroes, perhaps military heroes, ever. But because you're narrator is a boy I'll let it go.

I liked this more than your other ones....the dialogue was short and snappy and it moved with a good pace. Not sure sure about the three line perspective type thing, you should probably flesh it out a bit more.