Wandering is all i ever do.
i wonder Through hardships and smiles.
i think Life is a puzzle, waiting to be solved.
and this Is just another piece, haha! another at last!
i just need All the pieces to fit together!
here and there, I place puzzle pieces everywhere!
maybe the shop holds the next piece, or the next wanderer... Do you hold it?
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life is really messy, and wandering is Hard!
wandering over the Rocks and down the sandy beaches,
i Make my way through life, one step at a time!
maybe My journey will end soon... what a frightful thought! wander i must!
i've put my Feet on the ground, one step at a time. just a few more before the apple tree.
wandering i do, but it does make my soul Ache.
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But back to those puzzles pieces!
yesterday i did Not find one.
perhaps Just around the corner one is lurking.
perhaps i've lost My mind over these puzzle pieces.
ah! there's puzzle pieces under my Feet!
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My wanders lead me everywhere.
and it seems my Soul cherishes it.
but those Aches from the rocks will not go away!
i am a wanderer, traveling i must. As if i were running away!
Well, this is all i can share with you, i must wander away now!
**Capitalization is intentional! Freeform! No rhyme scheme here! Stanzas 2-4 have a secret message that is a sentence, or rather a complete though. Stanza 1 also has one... Yes, it goes off on parts, but we are really all mad when it comes down to it.**
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Greetings Ruroumi! Wandering Wizard here for a review day review!
Let me say that this poem touched me in the core of my heart. It is my goal in life to finish the great Puzzle of Life, and to help others where I can.
I love the fact that you made this more than just an poem. You made this an experience. This is an extraordinary piece, and I applaud for it.
The way you were able to hide a secret message in the last three stanzas, as well as the first stanza, yet still make the rest of the poem sensible. Bravo!
I thoroughly enjoyed this piece and will therefore give it a 8.5 out of ten. Splendid!
Sincerely,
The Wandering Wizard
P.S. -As a fellow wanderer and puzzle piece seeker, I will give you a piece of the Puzzle. I hope it fits perfectly.
Indeed it does fit
hi there, i'm here for a review
first of all i would like to say that i really love your work,inspiratioanl for me and simply amazing.
so i liked some lines like this ones
"i think Life is a puzzle, waiting to be solved.
and this Is just another piece, haha! another at last!"
"My wanders lead me everywhere.
and it seems my Soul cherishes it."
it's a great poem;so keep writting and keep the hard work,thank you c:
This was a nice read. Like the person below said, it really did capture wandering very, very well. It really makes me feel inspired.
The puzzle pieces, as someone who enjoys puzzles and knows the pain of losing pieces, was humorous and worked nicely. At least in my opinion.
Keep up the good work.
Hello, Rurouni, Chips here to review.
This was an interesting poem, it really conveyed the concept of wandering.
Wandering is all i ever do.
i wonder Through hardships and smiles.
i think Life is a puzzle, waiting to be solved.
and this Is just another piece, haha! another at last!
Here, I know your capitalization are intentional but after reading the message with them, I didn't really find it necessary in my opinion. The line, "and this is just another piece, haha! another at last" didn't really seem to fit and the word, "haha!" I would avoid using in poetry. There was an overuse of exclamation points which although was intended to express excitement, it became distracting.
"i just need All the pieces to fit together!
here and there, I place puzzle pieces everywhere!
maybe the shop holds the next piece, or the next wanderer... Do you hold it?"
There is also an overuse of exclamation points here. The ideas here seem a bit disorganized. I like the use of rhetorical question here though.
As an overview, I would focus on the poem itself that it has clarity and cohesiveness, as some stanzas seemed to be repetitive.
Overall nice piece though, keep writing.
--Chips