i]Ahhh...[/i] Arias was finally glad to relieve himself of that pop he just drank an hour ago. He'd had to take a test in chemistry and in the middle of it he'd felt the urge from the pop he'd drank in lunch. It wasn't his fault he'd totally forgotten about the test. If he'd known that he never would've drank it in the first place.
The chemistry teacher Ms. Patty was a haggard, old lady with a frizzy mop of white hair that adorned her head. She had the strictest rules, all in the name of preventing cheating in her class. Her beady black eyes were always watching, just in case someone decided to cheat. During tests she restricted anyone from going to the bathroom or outside of class for anything because she believed you could cheat somehow. Like, going to the bathroom and "discovering" the notes in your pocket to study off of. Whatever the reason was, there was no leaving that room.
It's worse for Arias of course beacuse it just so happens he has a going problem. And today, it turns out he'd forgotten to take his meds that help his problem. The teachers of course had been informed of his "little problem" and were pretty good about letting him leave to go to the bathroom, but not Ms. Patty.
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Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!
Anyway let's get right to it,
Okay...well, that sounds like a bit of an unfortunate accident there, its not a very easy thing to forget about a test...but then to miss a test for something of that nature is certainly pretty unique there. At any rate, it does a wonderful job of getting our attention as readers here. So, this is off to a fairly good start here, let's see where its headed.
Well, that seems like most teachers I've run across to be honest...cheating in exams tends to get taken pretty strictly, although it does depend on age. We don't quite know how old this person is so, depending on that, this could either be a teacher being a little bit overly strict or just being normal. At any rate, well, that does manage to do a decent job here of establishing a setting, so that's good.
Okay, well this part does suggest that this particular teacher is being more unreasonable than is advised, cause it looks like the protagonist has a diagnosed issue with relation to that and going against that sounds not just strict, but enough to actually get someone in legal trouble. Well it certainly makes for an interesting point to end on here. Overall, this was a fairly interesting piece here.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
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Harry
This is a great idea. You don't have enough points, but this would be a good storybook topic. There's not much I can review on. I was still thinking about your idea. I'll help with the story if you need it. Just ask me.
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