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Midnight Chronicles

by Roxanne


A page from Wednesday Addams' diary

Dear Demonic Diary,

I hope you have been bored to a painful death just waiting for me to open you up and carve words into your weak tan skin with my sharp quill.

We both know that when the clock strikes nine, and the pathetic little bird lets out its cry, the so-called "day" will be over.

I would rather refer to it as hours of deep pain and suffering for those nocturnal bats who are destined to be blinded by the sharp light, but of course, that would be too long a substitute for a miserable day.

Days on which acts of darkness and wickedness can take place are, in my opinion, do-able. Much to my dismay, such days are very rare. But such nights are not, which is exactly why I chose the night to carry out my devious plan.

At exactly eleven, the long corridors will be dead quiet, the ridiculous night lamps will be on- trying their tiring best to keep some of the light of the day in the night, students will be asleep and so will the teachers who unnecessarily waste their lifeless breath trying to educate students about dull facts, while immersing oneself in the realms of the art of taxidermy and preserving deceased creatures, or rituals and practices associated with witchcraft and dark magic can be more than just hauntingly captivating.

At exactly eleven, it will be time to prepare for my dangerous and terrifying plan. It is an extremely risky plan that will be carried out in the darkness of the cold night. But you know me, Dreadful Diary, I have an unholy adoration for danger and perilous risks that I will never be able to resist. And, fortunately, as you also know, I'm not afraid of the dark.

It feels like such a delight and pleasure to sit in this cold, neatly polished chair with a quill in my hand, carving all sorts of imaginative words in you that others might consider dark and treacherous. However, they are just simply providing a dangerous glimpse into my vicious plan.

Dear Twisted Diary, this is not the end.


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I love Wednesday Addams, she’s my favorite Addams Family character, so I just had to check this out. I have to say, this really does feel like a page from Wednesday’s diary. She seems like the type of person to write in a diary. It just fits her. I hope that her devious plan goes well, it’s always satisfying to see Wednesday win.

I hope that you will have an elegant day/night.




Roxanne says...


(releasing a burst of confetti) Another Wednesday fan! I appreciate your kind words!



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Hi there, as a fan of the Addams family series who has watched both the live action and animated versions, I thoroughly enjoyed your writing.
Firstly, I felt that the characterisation of Wednesday was done really well.
You managed to capture her essence of sadism, dark and sarcastic humour and her uniquely twisted vocabulary choice, which I thought required quite a bit of skill and understanding of the character.
I loved the starting, with the description of carving words into the diary's skin a very Wednesday thing to write. The comparison of day to night and the mention of the bats was done really well too and conveys her penchant for the darkness and distaste of the light.
I felt that the part of school teachers would be a little out of character for Wednesday to write though, its a small bug but "while learning about things" doesn't feel like a part of Wednesday's precise vocab arsenal
The sense of anticipation and build-up along with the cliff hanger was cool as well, and fits into the whole sense of underlying mystery which is a familiar motif in the series.
Overall, it was the accurate characterisation of Wednesday that felt constant and natural, interlaced throughout most elements of the text that impressed me.
Keep the stories coming, would love for a part 2!
Cheers!




Roxanne says...


Thank you for the feedback!



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Hello, Rose!

Good evening (in my time zone, at least!) I hope you're having a wonderful day! I'm a big fan of Wednesday, so reading this story was a must for me. And, I must say, that this was a delight to read. The voice was perfect; it really felt like Wednesday Addams was actually writing an entry in her diary. I loved the vocabulary and word usage. It's elegant and it flows well. You also captured the humor of the character too: the way she talks about the teachers wasting "their lifeless breath" made me chuckle.

You set up her thoughts very well, but I would love to see her write about the events from the show. We only have her plan to investigate the monster (I assume) but I would love to see her go more into depth on the mystery, Enid, or other characters or events.

I could see this becoming a series of entry pages that make up Wednesday's diary. It could even be normal days at school that didn't appear in the show.

Overall, I enjoyed your story! It was a lot of fun to read!




Roxanne says...


Hey there!

I've tried really really hard to bring the Wednesday vibe into the chronicle and I'm more than happy that you enjoyed it!
Thank you for the kind words!



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Hello this is Foxmaster!!!
O ho-ho, talk about a cliffhanger! As a fan of the show Wednesday, I am really excited to continue this. I wonder, are you writing about something that happened in the show, or something you have made up entirely by yourself? Hmmm...interesting. I'm also writing another book based off the show, called "The curse of This Monterow" about two girls who are the same person. One is really nice and happy, and the other is creepy. (I still remember how I was trying to find something creepy for the other evil This to say, and it was: "We should do something fun today!" said my sister, This. "Go to the morgue?" I asked, excited.)
Sooooo.... here comes the review!!!!

I hope you have been bored to a painful death just waiting for me to open you up and carve words into your weak tan skin with my sharp quill.

We both know that when the clock strikes nine, and the pathetic little bird lets out its cry, the so-called "day" will be over.

I would rather refer to it as hours of deep pain and suffering for those poor nocturnal bats who are destined to be blinded by the sharp light, but of course, that would be too long a substitute for a miserable day.

Days on which acts of darkness and wickedness can take place are, in my opinion, do-able. Much to my dismay, such days are very rare. But such nights are not, which is exactly why I chose the night to carry out my devious plan.

So first of all, I feel like this entry is pretty short. I hoped it would be longer, considering that Wednesday sounds like a dilly-dallier when it comes to writing, only talking about groovy goth stuff and I would rather she get to the POINT finally. I hope that's like it for the other diary entries and not so short and not much happening.
[/quote]At exactly eleven, it will be time to prepare for my dangerous and terrifying plan. It is an extremely risky plan that will be carried out in the darkness of the cold night. But you know me, Dreadful Diary, I have an unholy adoration for danger and perilous risks that I will never be able to resist. And, fortunately, as you also know, I'm not afraid of the dark.

It feels like such a delight and pleasure to sit in this cold, neatly polished chair with a quill in my hand, carving all sorts of imaginative words in you that others might consider dark and treacherous. However, they are just simply providing a dangerous glimpse into my vicious plan.[/quote]
So I'm wondering, is this plan like evil or something? hmmm...
Dear Twisted Diary, this is not the end.

so here I feel like this is strange because at the beginning, she called it a demonic diary and twisted diary just doesn't have the same ring to it, you know? Also, you're kind of throwing off a pattern and I advise to not do that later on.
That's all! I absolutely cannot wait to enjoy this, this is going to be good! Oh, or what if we partnered on this, alternating on different entries? I have some good ideas involving vampires....
-Foxmaster!!! The one and only! *cue heavenly chior because I am as cool as an angel*




Roxanne says...


Heyhey @foxmaster!

Glad you could drop by with a review! And yes, cliffhangers! I just happen to love those, so I thought 'why not include one?'. I really tried to make it sound like Wednesday, but I also had a word limit so I couldn't write too much. I do appreciate the feedback.

As for partnering on this, could be a good idea, but I've just started this chronicle and honestly I didn't even think about turning it into a series! It was just an assignment, but who knows maybe it'll turn into a series, but I'd like to experiment with it first.

Again, thank you for the feedback!



foxmaster says...


yup yup




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