Importance of Technology
Technology refers to advanced machines and equipment used in industry and in one community. With advancement, different technological invented tools had been very useful and efficient in our day today living. Our daily task at home, communication from our friends and family in different places, doing research paper for schools requirement and for the improvement of work in a company, this are some aspects of advancement. In this instance technology enhances education, transportation and communication.
During 1800s communication has already been a topic of conversation for the most researchers because of its inadequacy. But as early as 1908, Nathan B. Stubblefield of Murray Kentucky discovered a mobile phone that enable to transmit calls using radio. Year 1947, Bells Labs engineer of AT&T invented the cells for mobile phone. On the other hand, a long side with the invention of cellphone, computer was also invented. Different personality like Bill Gates improves the traditional use of cellphone to a highly enhance. Computer is a great source of communication. Different social media had been introduce to market like facebook, twitter, instagram, etc. It also make communication reliable and possible other than that computer helps the users to give sufficient information for research and requirements purposes
Transportational devices was also significant to us human beings, it takes us to a place where it is possible to rich comfortably and fastly unlike before. The history of auto mobile begins in 1769 with the creation of steam engine in France by Nicolas Joseph Cugnot. Robert Anderson was the second man who makes design for car and made use of electricity. On the other hand Karl Friedrich Benz was the fist man who created the fist gasoline engine vehicles and noted as the founder of Mercedes Benz auto industry. His 1st design was three wheeled four cycle engine and chases from single unit,
Education can be classified as form of knowledge, learnings, skills and habits, having education allows you to have a chance to get a better job, it cannot take away by someone because it is already programmed to our self as part of our existence we do not need richness to survive, only education. Through technology we can be educated. We can make things happen and we show the wolrd that we are indeed a product of this advancement.
Technology on a brighter side is God's gift to human. But then again, human beings have to be knowledgeable enough in the adverse effect of this technology not only human but also in general. We cannot relay on this technology. We still have our minds that can control everything. Learn how to value and appreciate our own potentials. Yes we need technology, but we have to use it well for our own safety and advantage. But keep this in mind that everything must have limitations, too much exposure with this technology brought harmful effects to different species of organism in a broader aspects.
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Though the grammatical and spelling errors, the essay and content are good.
Wow, thats a long essay u typed. Great Job Rod ^_^
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Nice essay, keep it up
Your topic is very interesting. The content is excellent. Nice job. Keep it up.
Your hook has a very nice thought but you should made it more eye catching. You have little errors but in all it was nice.
Very well said. Keep up the good work.
Great essay
Nice Essay! is just you have some wrong grammars but i know you can be more creative next time. Need more practice! But overall you have explained your point on your essay. job Well done!
Keep it up! 
I like your way on how to arrange your own topic. Also that was informative and interesting to read. In your first paragraph explain some aspects of technology and it seems that it was good. over all that was an excellent essay. keep going.
You have good ideas on your essay. But then, let me point out some that you can consider revising/editing.
In the first paragraph:
"...in our day today living." I believe you should put a space between "to" and "day".
"...and for the improvement of work in a company, these are some aspects of this advancement." The comma after the company should be a period because starting from "these" it's already a new sentence.
In the second:
"...discovered a mobile phone that enable to transmit calls using radio." maybe you should have used "enabled" instead.
"Different personality like Bill Gates improves the traditional use of cellphone to a highly enhance." maybe personality should be plural, improves should be past tense, and you can revise the phrase "to a highly enhance," maybe change it into "to a highly enhanced state" or something like that.
"Different social media had been introduce to market like facebook, twitter, instagram, etc." I think introduce on this part should be plural.
"...give sufficient information for research and requirements purposes." I think requirements shouldn't have an "s"
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"...it takes us to a place where it is possible to rich comfortably and fastly unlike before." You can consider revising on this part and make sure that your subject and verb agrees. You can also change the words to fit the meaning of what you want to put in the sentence.
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You should watch out with your punctuations. I haven't mentioned some of the errors but I have seen commas that should be replaced with periods because the group of words can be separate sentences. Also, I was confused with the first paragraph because you mentioned having harmful effects, where on the other hand you have discussed the help of technology in your essay.
But then, I can see that you have put much effort in writing your essay. You can do a better one next time by more practice. You have a good essay composed of good ideas. Just make sure that the grammar and content of your essay are coherent and clear. But again, you did a nice job. Good luck!
I agree with your point that technology though beneficial to humans, must be used wisely. Watch out with the use of your possessive noun. Remember that putting an apostrophe+s must be considered. But all in all, you have a good work.
Great job
You forgot your citations! Don't forget to include them.
In any case, what I really like about your essay is that it begins right away with defining technology. This is very important as it helps the reader to understand not only what you are writing about, but also gives a firm foundation for the rest of the essay. You then go into specific inventions stretching back to the steam engine, which is terrific. We often forget that the Internet is just the latest disruptive technology, failing to realize that many that have come before were just as (if not more) disruptive.
In all, a very good look at technology and how it benefits us. But, include your citations!
i like your essay, the thoughts and ideas are organized properly. keep it up.
i like your essay, the thoughts and ideas are organized properly. keep it up.
Wow, you have improved a lot. The topic you chose was good and have significant to present generation. Try to meditate and read more in order to improve yourself more. One advise, please cite the source of the details you used. Nice work and keep Going. God bless!
Nice essay!
Good job;-)!
I love it. You've made an excellent essay. Job well done.
You have a point on your essay. Keep up the good work!
Nice essay.
Informative one!!
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Nice one. I like your essay. Keep up the good work.
For the most part, it's a good essay. You have a lot of grammar mistakes. I would go through and try to fix some of those. The content of your essay is decent. It's not good to use first person in an essay so you might wanna fix that. Also, you should indent your paragraph.s