Young Writers Society

Sorry for the pretty short review but If I had something to complain about It could be longer but what to do.It is pretty good.The punctuation is off but this is a way to go through also.It is not that wrong honestly.Just some prefer it more than others so do not take it too deep if you hear it as a big negative thought from others.You make the readers relate.I rarely like poems to be honest but maybe the dark theme just got me liking it.
Every sentence was well connected with the next one so I pretty much do not have anything to say.To be honest I did not like the repeatment in this pieace of art the first time I read it but I understood it better after several readings.I found rhymes here and there.If you read it our loud the right way even if there is no rhyme on some places..it still sounds good.
Good job.

Hello, Robusto! This is Moonwatcher with a short little review. First I will say, I love this poem. I don't love many poems, I like them. But I actually loved this poem. I guess it's the emotion. I can feel the mix of emotion in the poem. It's so relatable, and I am no afraid to say I love this poem. Um, there wasn't very much wrong with the poem/ Some punctuation and some stanzas will definitely improve the flow of the poem. Again, I really loved this poem, and I gotta say you have some skills. Excellent work!

Wow. I can relate to what you are saying in this poem. I know how it feels to be distraught with all of the conflicts that are present in society, within friends or family, and within yourself. There is so much fear and pain present and it is extremely overwhelming and discouraging to see the digression of generations and the loss of human interaction through screens, which are supposed to be tools of innovation and expression. I understand what it is like to feel as if there is so much left to do, but not enough time, power, and will to do so. Like you mentioned in another review, it's not depression or negativity, it is nostalgia and seeing the importance of innovation through passion and necessity that you exhibit in this poem.
I have found that I can't relate to many of my peers because I feel that a lot of us have lost the capability to understand that the conflicts and necessity for change is all happening at the same time. There is pain that has been felt, is being felt, and has yet to be felt. Our job is not to dwell on that pain, but instead to understand it, and drive change from there. It is exhausting and painful when you see how ignorant and numb the world is to the pain that is happening everywhere, but in the end, I think that people like you (who know that hurt that is happening), can use your feelings as a way to help others, and mend the world one step at a time. I apologize if I misinterpreted the poem in any way. Thank you for writing this, it really made my day.

Hey!

I really liked this poem. I found myself relating to it a lot. I feel like it would improve if you added proper punctuation and maybe added stanzas. I didn't find any that was really wrong with this poem. It flowed really well. The emotion in the poem was perfect. I feel like it was very easy to understand the narrator's pain

So sorry that this review was really short :/ I think if you add stanzas and fix the punctuation this poem will be perfect!

Have a wonderful day,
Alice ♥

This is a really good poem. Thank you for posting it on here. I am here to give a positive review, not a constructive one because I have foud nothing wrong with the poem personally. It was wonderfully written.
My favorite line in the poem is "Words unspoken? Tears unshed?" I can really relate to this line. It makes me think of my own personal feelings.
I hope well kind of hope that this isn't out of personal experience, that you aren't as deep in depression as the poem makes you sound like u are.
(I am and I know how much it sucks, I'm glad no one notices tho lol)
I like how you mention caring for all people, the ones you have met and haven't. I have noticed that a lot of people in the world don't feel the same way about such things. I am glad to know that there is at least one other people lover on this earth.
It feels like you really didn't know what was going on in the poem. Like you didn't know why you had the feelings that you did.. I hope that you got through that. I am glad that you have some good writing though. I hope if you don't get anything else of this comment/review that you remember two things, you and your writing is absolutely beautiful, and that you need to keep smiling and keep going, even if you don't know what you are going through or feeling at the moment, you will soon enough.