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"Calcitrop... retired?" Michael asked. "And then was... deported?"
"Yes," Phineas said. "And their dictatorial president turned their government into a monarchy in the process. Thira worships Hastam as a god."
"Blasphemy," Michael groaned. "Just great..." He turned to Alexia. "Are we legally required to help snakes?"
"Nope," the old woman answered. "Official alliances between Thirans and Belecthorians are illegal under royal law."
"Good," Michael said. "Have someone bring him here. He won't be a Thiran for much longer. Snakes are useful if they can be tamed."
"Not a snake," Phineas corrected, "but a weasel."
Michael reached for his plain white handkerchief and started coughing, huffing and puffing as though he'd been smoking for years. When his fit subsided, he said, "I don't trust these Nesrin doctors. I'm not satisfied with my care."
"You'll have Edwin back soon enough, sir," Phineas replied.
"Not soon enough--" Michael burst out into a cough again, just a speckle of red dotting the once pure cloth. "How much longer... until the invasion by Nesrin is officially over?"
"An hour at most," Alexia answered. "Their vice president has already been captured. Dragonheart supporters are flocking to Misty Pass as we speak. Correct, Natalia?"
The emissary's dark eyes flicked up from where they had been lingering on the cloth in Michael's hand. She blinked at Alexia and nodded. "We have our own soldiers on the other side, in Norburn, as well."
"Good," Michael said. "Very good. I'll be home before nightfall, and I can see a real doctor that knows what they're doing... Dry cough my foot... I drink a gallon of tea a day, and twice that in water."
"They aren't Belecthorians," Phineas said. "Doctors here just can't do their jobs right. The Allegorians in the Hamiltons are decent enough, but there is no better doctor than a Belecthorian doctor."
"You... think it's something bad?" Natalia asked them softly.
"No," Michael answered, "but I do think that Asterin's doctors don't have a clue as to what they're doing. All they did was recommend more tea..."
Natalia absently shifted her weight and leaned against the big table behind her, giving a small nod. "Mm... Things from home are often better," she said thoughtfully.
All of a sudden, without a knock or announcement, the doors to the room swung open. "Mikey!" a high-pitched voice said. "I missed you."
Michael cringed and looked at Natalia, as if to beg her to save him. He actually mouthed the word, "Help."
She smiled a tiny bit in an apologetic way and glanced past him as Queen Cynthia came hurrying in, extravagant white skirt billowing around her and golden jewelry jingling at her side.
"Are you feeling any better, Mikey Wikey?" she asked, sticking out her lower lip.
"Much," Michael lied, voice clearly hoarse. "Er... Cynthia, why are you here?"
"I'm going with you to Belecthoria!" Her face beamed.
"...why?"
"It's on my way home, silly!" she laughed.
Natalia's gaze flicked over the queen and then down to the floor at her own feet. She pressed her hand lightly against her right leg, politely pretending not to pay attention to the two of them.
Michael paled. "Could Natalia and I have the room please."
"But Mikey--"
"You heard His Majesty!" Phineas said, hopping up. "Come on, out with you." He and Alexia escorted a pouting Cynthia from the room, locking the door behind them so Cynthia could not enter again.
The Belecthorian breathed a sigh of relief. "I am very, very happy that I only touch guns during Easter."
With a faintly nervous glance at the door, Natalia gave him a gently chiding look like she didn't believe he was serious. "She can be-- a bit much," she said, watching his expression closely.
Michael frowned. "That's a bit of an understatement... As a far left authoritarian monarch, it is very hard to deal with-- her. She makes politics between our nations so... difficult... just because she thinks I love her or something..." He shook his head and glanced towards the big window.
Natalia's smile hung on as she glanced down again and said quietly, "She fancies you."
"What?" he said sarcastically. "I had no idea! Why didn't anyone tell me?" After a moment or two, he allowed himself to laugh before he started coughing again-- no blood this time. He sighed as he pocketed his handkerchief again, "I'm just happy to be going home."
She watched him a bit worriedly and nodded. "I will too, soon..." Back to her home and country, he back to his. It'd likely be just as before. She'd go back to Shanoa, to the Council, and in a day or two the freshness of this other world would wear away, she'd settle back into routine. A routine that had very little to do with anyone outside... How quickly, she wondered, would he forget her?
"I want to establish official relations between Misericord and Belecthoria."
Something fluttered lightly inside her chest. "Oh... I don't know... I don't know what the Council will say I mean."
"Oh... um..." Michael paused before joking, "What if I threatened them with war, pain, death, and destruction? Would they consider it then?"
"I think they would consider hating you and flooding Misty Pass so you could not get through," she said through a laugh that thickened her accent.
"Oh. We... could..." Michael shrugged. "Is there not a surefire way...?"
"Way for what?" she asked, hoping silently.
"I'd like to see you again after all of this mess is straightened out."
A warm smile lit her face in a moment. "I'd like that." Though the question of how still remained. Natalia rested her hands on the edge of the table and looked down, quiet for a few seconds. "I've not traveled much... But I think I could. It's very different here, and I'd like to see Belecthoria too."
"I'd like to see Misericord," Michael replied. "You've met members of my family, and I'd like to meet yours."
"Ahm..." She looked down again uncomfortably before putting together a reply. "They... live much farther south, I don't see them much... But if you came sometime-- if you wanted to come... I live close to Shanoa, we could visit."
"That'd be nice," he answered. "Misericord is only so big, after all."
She laughed a little and nodded. "It feels bigger than it looks on the map."
Before Michael could reply, there was a knock on the door. "We're ready!" Asterin called.
A soft sigh left Natalia's shoulders. She smiled at the king and gave him a small nod. "Have a safe trip back, Michael."
"I will," he said with a smile, eyes flashing excitedly.
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Later that night, Natalia tossed her dark hair back behind her shoulder, letting it fall down the full length of her back and smoothed the front of her silky pajama top. Then she went quietly across the lush, creamy carpet to her bed. Nearby, Lucy was already snuggled down in her own bed, seemingly lost in the mound of pillows and a fluffy gray comforter. She was on her side, eyes open, and watched Natalia climb into bed and pull her own blanket up close to her chin under her arm. Brunovo was in the next room of their suite, already fast asleep.
"Well, we'll be home tomorrow," Lucy whispered with a smile.
Natalia smiled back a little tiredly. "It's been awhile since we've been here for more than a few weeks, hasn't it?"
"Four months."
They were both quite a few moments before Lucy whispered, "It'll be nice to really get back."
"Yeah..."
Lucy studied her friend a moment. Natalia was staring past the feet of their beds at the big, wide window on the opposite wall, it's dark blue curtains drawn back to let the soft moonlight drift in. "But...?"
Natalia's eyes shifted to Lucy's face. "But what?"
"What are you thinking about?"
Natalia sighed quietly and looked out the window again. Beyond the gates of Asterin's palace, the great capital city of Nesrin twinkled and glared into the night. "It's getting worse back home..."
The room was quiet before Lucy answered. "We're getting help now. The king's going back home. He'll have things under control again soon and can start sending aid properly."
"It's been too long," Natalia whispered. Lucy just looked at her from her bed.
Twice a week since they'd come here, except on the few week-long stays back home, they'd had conference calls, one with Natalia's advisors in Shanoa, who'd been left in charge, and one with the remaining members of the Council. At first, things were alright. Nothing changed much from how it'd been when she'd left, but then things started shifting more steadily. Stability declined as tensions escalated. Jason and his followers in the reform movement became more vocal, more imposing. Their gatherings began happening more frequently and in greater numbers, every speech warning of some impending destruction from outside.
The two young women fell silent, neither looking directly at the other. Eventually, Lucy rolled over to her other side-- a loud rustle, then stilness. Natalia laid awake a long while, blinking sometimes as she stared out the moonlit window at the faded sky above this foreign city.
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The chair was carved of a fine oak, crested with several jewels and decorative metals forming an elegant coat of arms. The cushions were made of the finest midnight blue silk, and the hall around it was built of firm gray stone, with great wooden beams holding up the ceiling. Fans were hidden in the rafters, and the dim lights were disguised in the walnut floor.
"How long has it been, Phineas?" Michael asked, filled with familiarality as he entered his throne room.
"Almost ten months, sir," the old man answered. "Will you sit, sir?"
Michael looked upon his empty throne-- almost empty. He lifted a note with a large black "GH" stamped onto it and then looked at Phineas. "Hughes has been here."
"Are you sure, sire?" Phineas asked nervously.
Michael opened the note and read aloud, "You have won this round. The next will not be so easy. A new power is rising, one that you cannot beat alone. By the time you read this, I will already be far away from you and in the clutches of another. But a revolution will come. -Gerald Hughes."
"What does it mean?" Phineas asked.
"It means that the chief conspirator has escaped us," Michael said with a sigh.
He took a step back and gazed upon his throne. On his right hand was his ring, passed from generation to generation-- ancient beyond count of years and priced beyond the value of all material things. Its silver gleamed, despite the dim light. Michael turned, straightening his back. He took a deep breath as he sat, back against the silk, rooting himself back into his kingdom, his homeland.
"Long live the King."
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Okay so the title seems to indicate that this chapter end positively ,, right? >.>
WELL that doesn't sound too good
wait but who is Calcitrop again and the other people.I can't remember if they've been mentioned before, but if not, it would be helpful to explain a little more about these peeps so I can understand what's going on hehe c: and omg if you already mentioned them before and I just forgot, please ignore me xDMichael voices his opinions pretty strongly about others, and he's quite confident. I see this over and over again with your chapters, so I seriously love how consistent he is and how much of his personality I can find through his words and actions! ^_^
Oof, poor Nesrin doctors >.> I wonder why he thinks so
omg ouch I feel bad for the Nesrin doctors though, I'm sure they're just trying their best </3 not every place has the same access to medical supplies and education. they seem very prideful of their origin xD
what are you talking about , that's the perfect cure for everything :D
ahh I'm just imagining being in Michael's place, I'd feel so embarrassed xD
just a suggestion that randomly popped in my head, if you want to give that high-pitched feel, you could say "a high-pitched voice squeaked." just a random suggestion cx
AHHHHHHHHH
oh my goodness at first I didn't see the "sarcastically" and I was like how on earth did he not know 0.0
don't worry Natalia, I'm sure it's going to be never xD
ooh yeah, I'm noticing in this chapter that there are also a lot of ellipsis, so they're losing their impact a bit xD I get doing it with Natalia since she often trails off, but maybe you could try to eliminate some overall? just a suggestion!
OH HOHO HOHOOHHOH WOOHOO
WOW I did not realize how much time has passed!
Ooh, I love this description! It's like hey, we're finally back to our place, and the grandness of the descriptions can show how Michael was used to living or how everything seems so grand and wonderful now that he's back home!
omg how was he able to get in 0.0 that is super eerie and creepy, I'd be totally freaked out if I were him xD
and that brings me to wonder, I get that he's a bit more nonchalant, but I wonder about his inner feelings? did his heart drop when he read that note? or did he feel lightheaded? or maybe his hand felt super heavy when he picked up the note, or maybe the note felt super heavy! just some thoughts to consider. his life feels like it's on the line, so maybe he'd be more responsive? idk xD
yes please don't kill Michael or I will cry
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I don't think we're writing this anymore... No idea xD
BUT
I have been getting back to RiverClan a bit, so I'll be back on a schedule more or less soon c:
tysm for the review <333
Hey! Since I'm following this story, I should probably review it as well.
Wellllllll, Michael and Phineas sound just a bit biased here, don’t they? XD
I might not be a health expert, but that sounds like a lot...
Oh, dear. That’s lucky for Cynthia.
This is a pretty good way to remind us that Misericord is an isolationist nation that mostly keeps to itself. I could probably see them doing that so they’d never be bothered by outside events again.
I’m not sure I remember who Gerard Hughes is. I could just not be remembering his role in the story, but in case he hasn’t really been covered, I would suggest a better description near the end of the chapter.
Anyway, that’s what I have to say. Have a nice day!
- Shadow
Thanks! <3
Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),

Hi! I'm Knight Hardy here on a mission to ensure that all works on YWS has at least two reviews. You will probably never see this but....Imma do this anyway.
First Impression: Okay is this another time skip? 'Cause I wasn't quite sure how this one related to the rest but the really nicely presented friendship between Michael and Natalia suggested so. And well I liked the ending, that sounded like it was going somewhere and I am maybe starting to get a little idea of what is happening but mostly it is still a bit murky in terms of actual plot at least to me. Maybe I just have too many things in my head.
Anyway let's get right to it,
Already trying to frantically remember who that is in the first paragraph...not the greatest of signs but heyyy at least I remember Micheal...he's the king...maybe of someplace...
Snakes and weasels are both quite annoying but to each their own.
Red on pure clothes after coughing is never a good sign.
If my math is correct that should be far too much liquid for a person to ingest so I'm hoping that was meant to be an exaggeration.
Well at least that's better than some of the things they did back in the day.
Decent bit of description there.
Okay pouting Queen check...I have no idea if she was present before but I'll probably not forget her after that scene which is a good thing I think.
*giggling intensifies*
Harry...you are a prince of the freaking underworld, giggling is forbidden.
Sorry.
Well that's some pretty serious jokes right there. I mean wouldn't you expect a monarch to be more...careful with their word choices, I mean it is private but then you never know.
Okay that was a lovely conversation there in the private part. Loved the very subtle language there and you could really tell they are friends. Pretty good job there.
Blame Vil for that.
Okay that was a pretty helpful little summary to put in there. Just about short enough to not be called an info dump and not long enough to be boring which means 'tis perfect.
Nice description once more!!
Well somebody likes to be dramatic about things and that's fine. Its always fun to have someone that likes to leave elaborate messages like that.
Oooh that one ended up pretty awesome note there. That paragraph did a wonderful job of sorting hyping you up for what's coming next sort of like a Avengers Assemble moment and that is of course only capable of being a good thing.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
Overall: Overall this seems to be going somewhere although I can't see where that somewhere is. Other than that, the chapter just judged as a chapter is pretty good. I feel like we maybe met a whole bunch of characters again although it could just be because I forgot but the descriptions and the dialogue all seemed really nice and that's always great to see.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
Thanks for the review
even though I somehow didn't get a notif for it XD!Thanks!
That's the first time Calcitrop has been mentioned I believe
so ack, we have to make that more apparent XDI think the plot should be a lot clearer by the-- @Vil is the next chapter or the one after that The Big Thing%u2122 happens? We should probably go back and revise at some point to make it clearer from the beginning :p
It starts in the next and ends in the one after