Young Writers Society

Hello RhymortusWaever and welcome to YWS! Violet here to give you a quick review First off, I just want to say that I love the title. It clues the reader in to the subject matter without you having to say what it is about overtly in the poem. Those are my personal favorite type of titles for poems. I also really appreciated all of the colorful imagery, I feel like I can see the otters in front of me in the water.

I think that this is a good first draft, and I believe adding a couple more stanzas, adding on to the beautiful imagery that you already have going, could really make this poem sing. Concrete details using even more of the five senses could add a lot. Thank you for writing such a sweet poem, I hope this helps!
~Violet <3

Hi, here to write a review! 🙃

This was some very good writing.
I almost cried at the end. I loved how in such a short piece of writing you made the reader feel warm and happy, then after taking a dark turn making us grief. I miss the otter.
*crys*
This was on my podium of the many things I read today. Unfortunately I was rickrolled on this website so that did not make the podium.
I hope you have a great day and that you do not get rickrolled.
👋

Hi!

I really liked this poem and how expressive you made it. The image you drew is beautiful, and I can imagine how the speaker feels through the way the setting is described. It feels serene and peaceful, and you portrayed that wonderfully.

Although I admire how much emotion you are able to put into just two stanzas, I think the last two sentences could have been drawn out more. The ending was very descriptive, but lacked detail on how the speaker felt. He talks so freely and blithely about the otter, and that joy comes to an end for rest, the speaker fails to change his tone and speaks as contentedly without the otter than he did with it. As the reader it felt hollow, and I would expect that the emotions the speaker would face be heavier. Maybe adding a few extra lines that articulate what feelings this person faces would help add emphasis on the closure of the poem.

This is very good work and I really appreciate how detailed it was while still leaving room for interpretation. I adored it and I hope to see more of your poems in the future.

fructose
<3

Not going to be a long review, I'll make it brief. It's a nice little poem with some heart in it. I can appreciate the punny name but I can also appreciate the wholesome feeling this exudes. All in all, fairly nice poetry. I don't have any major complaints and saying I wish it was longer is more of a compliment anyhow.