Hello RhymortusWaever and welcome to YWS! Violet here to give you a quick review First off, I just want to say that I love the title. It clues the reader in to the subject matter without you having to say what it is about overtly in the poem. Those are my personal favorite type of titles for poems. I also really appreciated all of the colorful imagery, I feel like I can see the otters in front of me in the water.
I think that this is a good first draft, and I believe adding a couple more stanzas, adding on to the beautiful imagery that you already have going, could really make this poem sing. Concrete details using even more of the five senses could add a lot. Thank you for writing such a sweet poem, I hope this helps!
~Violet <3
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