Published November 26, 2007
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oh...this is great! I like it. It a way I'm like John Smith being open and stuff. Nt very religious, and I can handle the truth very easlily.
I hope there is more!
This was pretty good!
I found it a little rambly, making me want to skim and a little telly rather than showy... but you just want grammar corrections, so that's what I'll give you.
Should be 'Smith'.
Firstly, it should be 'The dead only know death.' And secondly, I think that since this is a reoccurring theme, you should make it flow better... maybe 'Only the dead know death.'
Should be 'hope' not 'hopes'.
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I think that's it for the grammar... you could work on it to flow better, though...
~Azila~