I'm staying still
Trying to make it over that hill
I get so close
But it's never enough
The road ahead I cannot see
I keep falling back
To the bottom of that hill
The more I try
The farther back I slide
The road ahead has lost its light
I tell myself
I'll make it past that hill
But I find myself back where i began
Sometimes I wonder
Will I ever make it over that hill
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This is a great metaphorical piece, I appreciate it's realistic value and it kind if reminds me of the song lyrics so far away but still so near the lights go on the music died - it's by Robyn someone...
and there's a cover by Calum Scott, anyway - my only piece of feed back would be grammar, so like I'm instead of Im and I instead of i. Great Job
Thanks for the feedback, I completely forgot about the grammar before I posted this