I'm sitting at my computer.
I type a line, then I rest my hand on the backspace until all letters are off
the screen.
A poem, a story, a song, a random thought.
Not knowing what to say, I constantly change my ideas.
Love, Hate, Sin, Faith, Friends.
What should I pick?
Some days I want to write, nothing comes to mind.
I go blank like a deer in headlights.
I sit and stare at the monitor until my eyes go dry.
I blink then I get a thought.
Lets go chat up a storm on Myspace.com.
So I leave YWS, not to return for another hour or so.
*I wrote this crap because I was bored and had no idea on what to write or what to say. so enjoy my crap.
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enjoy it I did. The simple expression of writer's block while writing something good to express it
Hahahahaha
Nice!!!Original, too! I liked it. A lot!
Keep writing!
Jasmine Hart...I hate to correct you, but in your signature? Her name is Stephenie Meyer, with an e instead of an a. Sorry for being such a prig!!!!
Rena, I know how you feel. The same thing happens to me all the time. Writer's block. Jeez. I hate it.
Anyways, great job!
-Icequeen
I liked this. The first stanza is very good and I like the whole "backspace" thing, but I'd get rid of the last line here as it's too colloquial and I don't think you really need it.
I'd change "I go blank like a deer in the headlights" as it sounds stale. I enjoyed what you said in the end of this stanza.
This could be tighter and more powerful. Try playing around with it and see what happens. Hope this helps.