Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
Hi! I'm Knight Hardy here on a mission to ensure that all works on YWS has at least two reviews. You will probably never see this but....Imma do this anyway.
First Impression: Hmm....this one is better than the previous one that I reviewed. And I think this one was meant to be read before that so maybe that had something to do with it. I am dumb. I know Putting that aside, the overall flow of this was something that I really liked. It felt a lot more homogeneous than the previous one did and you can see the whole build up to the Greg fiasco spread out nicely among the days which is also great thing.
Anyway let's get right to it,
I just go finished writing some emails to Mom, Dad, and my friend from high school. I know I said I was starting to feel at home here, but it made me feel homesick. I miss having dinner with Mom and Dad, and lunch with Gabriella. Today I had lunch with some people from my class. Those guys are always laughing, and it makes me laugh just being around them.
Well that's a nice sentiment to include there. I probably should have read more to figure out the backstory behind this but I guess I'll just roll with the idea of this family that she's missing being a subtle reference.
While I was waiting for my first class to start, I discovered another thing I light about going barefoot. The prof hadn’t come to open the door yet, so I was talking to a few others in the class just outside the door. That hall is right next to the main entrance, so there was a lot of traffic. Someone, I don’t know who he is, notice my feet and had to comment. “You’re brave!” Hee hee! I am definitely going to keep doing this. People’s reactions are fun!
Well this brought a smile to my face.
And the information overload continues! Today wasn’t nearly as bad as last week, though. The profs have stopped bombarding us with new things every minute we’re in class and have gotten to the regular lectures. This time it was just during soc. We’re doing presentations on the community resources and agencies in Cornwall. The prof, Benoit, handed out guidelines (as if my binder wasn’t heavy enough) and divided us into groups.
Your use of these shortened forms are a great idea I think because it really lends credibility to the fact that this is styled in the form of a diary. Its just a really garnish to the writing style as a whole.
Meeting my group made my stomach do back flips. They’re all older than I am, in their thirties and forties. They must think I’m a little kid, especially since I could easily pass for twelve if I wanted to. I can only hope they won’t treat me like one.
That does not sound like a great situation to be in.
Greg was the only one in the common room after class. He has a pretty light course load this semester, so he practically lives in the common room. We talked for almost an hour.
Nice bit of foreshadowing.
Geez. I came very close to passing out from embarrassment just now. I really have to remember to knock before going into the bathroom. The door can only be locked to keep your roommate from getting into your room, not to keep you from getting into the bathroom. Guess that would just cause more problems. It’s easier to just learn to knock. When I opened the door, Kate was sitting on the toilet! Thankfully, she could reach the door from there and closed it before either of us saw something we shouldn’t.
Oh dear...that must have been horribly embarrassing indeed.
I practically had a heart attack when the alarm went off. And I think I came very close to wetting my bed. It was really only instinct that told me, and everyone else on the floor, to go outside. Most of didn’t have anything on our feet, and most of the guys didn’t have a shirt on. Which was perfect, since we ended up going into the back parking lot. Only a few feet away from the river.
*falls of chair laughing at mental image*
When he asked me, I just froze. I couldn’t say anything at all. All through high school, nobody asked me out to a movie. Or anything, for that matter. Someone tried to set me up once. The guy was at least as shy as I am, so the girl who set us up came a long. The entire thing was pathetic, and we never went out again.
It was such a relief when someone came into the room. He turned the TV onto some stupid wrestling thing. Gave me an excuse to leave. I have no idea what I should do now. I could go out with him, but what would happen if he found out the truth about me?
This isn't the most emotionally packed way of conveying this to the readers but I think it does a fairly decent job of conveying some kind of emotion so that's okay.
Aaand that's it for this one.
Overall: Another really fun series of entries. This is going to go on the list of stories that I will track down and read after one day I finally finish my mission and find that elusive dragon. Like I said in the previous its a fun and simple concept that's done quite well and conveys a surprisingly deep moral through it.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
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