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Dark Pharaoh Raped

by Redfang18


I walk in the night, being the stalker of all evil and protector of all good
For here on this twilight hour- in this yard of graves- is my neighborhood.
The moon is full, but red as blood
And I stand still in the yard's mud
Terrified of what's stalking me as the prey
And seemingly timing every delay
Of my schedule during the Midnight Hour
That is my moment; my moment of power.
A cold hand seizes me from behind,
Then a cloth is placed to make me blind.
My clothes were torn off my skin and left me bare
And I shivered as I was caressed from my muddied hair.
A push was made from something hard
Between my legs without a bombard.[*]
As many pushes were made against me,
I was on my back until the clock called three.
When the worst was over, I was free from bond
And left alone as I listened to the spirits beyond
My range of hearing which was ten feet around
As I lay there weeping with my back on the ground.
The cloth was removed from my eyes by my host's hand-
My host the Next Pharaoh, Mistress of the land.
She called my disposition a classic rape,
A virtue-stealing act that no one can escape.
I remain in the Dragon's Den where I now sleep,
Like the dead below- sleep very deep.



Spoiler! :
A bombard is my way of saying "a condom."


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Sun May 08, 2011 7:41 am
WaitingForLife wrote a review...



This was really nicely written, the rhymes flowed smoothly and the story itself was so unusual that it brought a nice little taste to it all. In my opinion, you don't neccesarily have to break it into stanzas, as this formatting does it for me well. I guess it's that because of the lack of stanzas, I see it more of a flowing entity, instead of just loosely related fragments, if you know what I mean. But yeah, I applaud you for writing of such an unsettling subject..

Keep on writing :)

|Your's truly~|




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Sun May 08, 2011 2:36 am
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First thing is first, you need to break up the poem into stanzas. It would be way easier to read. Other than that. I liked this. In a sad sorta way ...but it was a very interesting poem. But it also makes me wonder...are you speaking from personal expirence. You don't have to answer, but if you wanna you can PM me or something. But it also could be a random poem. Anyway, let me stop before I ramble. Great poem. Keep up the good work. Happy Writing!!! :)





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