[A/N: This is a collection of short poems that I've started to work on. It's one of my first attempts at poetry, so enjoy!]
Wings of a Butterfly
Struggling against the wind,
The butterfly flaps, flaps, flaps its wings.
Ripping,
Scarring,
Destroying
It tumbles through the air,
And falls through the darkness below
Ravens
Ravens claw through the darkness to reach the light.
They hide in my ribcage, waiting for the ghosts to cry.
They whisper,
Sweet ethereal bliss.
When my skin illuminates with red,
They scream,
They’re set free.
Porcelain Frame
Smiling back at her,
With bottomless blue eyes,
Her reflection
Lies beautifully.
Be careful,
Because if it keeps lying,
Her pretty porcelain frame
Will crack.
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I agree, this is great for your first time at poetry. The only poetry I can write are the ones that rhyme and even then the sound like crap. However, this is great for your first time. I like the thrid and first one, but the one with the ravens didn't make much sense. i had to read it a few times to actually understnad what you were saying, and I didn't even get it completely. However, great job on the other two!
Ciao!
Hey!
This is your first attempt at poetry? are you sure? Because this was really good.
My only problem is the punctuation. You do not need to punctuate every line in a poem, it just gets distracting.
Try this: (I also made the first two lines into four lines, to make everything look more even.)
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Besides that, I love it! Keep writing,
May