Young Writers Society

Hello! My name is Tambo and I’m here to review your poem.

This poem was very triggering for me! 😅 You basically just described all of the world’s problems into one poem! This definitely made everyone (including me) look at the world and see that mostly everything needs to change, and I think I speak for everyone here when I say that this poem gave me goosebumps. My favourite part is when you spoke to the reader and said

look around you

Hello there! This is Orabella, here with a review!

I don't think I've read anything by you yet, which is a shame because this is absolutly amazing! You've got a gift for pulling on heartstrings, and boy, this sure does. I'm gonna go crawl up into a ball and cry now; see you in a bit.

On its own, this is incredibly sad, but the fact that it is based on real life - is real life - makes it so much harder and more beautiful to read. I know these events and I can see some of them happening around me. The way you were able to capture these emotions is awesome, and definitely something I struggle with in my own writing. But you pulled it off so beautifully! Nice job!! (Seriously, the utter sense of hopelessness that washed over me in the middle of this is crazy, and not something I was expecting to feel, even with the topic.)

Look around you

We will fix it

Probably fix it

If we fail

At least we tried

I like the poignant and reflective tone of the poem, which effectively highlights the pressing issues facing our planet. The repetition of "Why?" emphasizes the sense of urgency and frustration regarding the world's problems. The use of specific examples from different regions and contexts adds depth and relevance to the poem's message. The call to action in the latter part of the poem is empowering and encourages readers to consider their role in addressing global challenges. Overall, the poem effectively captures the complexity of contemporary issues while offering hope and a sense of collective responsibility.
The imagery and language used in the poem vividly portray the harsh realities of our time, evoking a strong emotional response from the reader. The juxtaposition of destruction and hope underscores the duality of the human experience, reminding us that amidst the chaos, there is still potential for positive change. By urging readers to take action and emphasizing the importance of collective effort, the poem instills a sense of responsibility and agency in addressing societal issues. It serves as a poignant reminder of the interconnectedness of humanity and the need for compassion, empathy, and solidarity in facing the challenges ahead.