Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
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I have seen god. I have seen the devil. I’ve seen demons also angels. Yet all seem to be the same, as each glimpse of their divine bodies left my thoughts into whispers and chaos. I have only had one chance to gaze upon the one I believe to be god. I will forever regret my interest in the truth, as the truth is as horrifying as any twisted god, or convulsed creature you can possibly fathom. That is my judgment, that the gods we worship and pray to are merely one singular being, one of chaos and unfathomable will. Its shape is one that will haunt my nightmares till death holds me within its saving grace. I can barely scribble up what I saw on that moonless night, for if I do, I must recall the terror that drowned my heart. That left me holding my breath, in hopes that I may die before its ever shifting form is scorched into the deepest trenches of my shattered mind. I can feel its will, its oozing black tendrils grasping my soul. Trying to tear it from my body, so it may take this vessel as its own. I don’t want such a thing to happen, I don't want to give in to that monstrosity. I can try to fight back, but I know that I will lose. How can a mere mortal compete with god. It's just merely a fool's dream, but it is the only hope I can possibly have. My vision has been blurred ever since that night. My thoughts are never coherent, always in shambles. Perhaps this last testament to what I have witnessed will be the last comprehensible thing I ever write on this yellowed paper. I can feel the madness filling me up, it's slow. Slow and methodical. Never letting me rest my weary body. Yet it's also painless, perhaps the only pity that I can receive from this god. Oh, how I wish I had chosen to put a bullet through my brain. A much more favorable end compared to what fate has led me to. It wont even let me die, I have shot, drowned, pounded, scraped, and broken my body. Yet every time this damn god won't let me leave its hold. How can something so disgusting hold the power of death? Why must we humans have no control over our destiny? Why should this demented creature be able to choose whether we live or die, whether we rise as empires or Succumb to the void of madness? For whomever may stumble upon this note that details the last thoughts of a damned fellow, find my body. Kill it, burn it, blow it up, I don't care. Just make sure that God is never able to enter our world. For if it does, I fear that our world shall end. Humanity will be erased and perhaps never again begin. It will be the end of everything. The last being, living or in another state, that shall ever exist. It is the fate God has allowed me to perceive, whether its true or just another way to torture its prey I will never know. I will choose to believe it, so to you who can hopefully grasp this dying man's words. End this for me, for all of existence that has been, and will ever be. Kill god.
Well this is quite an intriguing piece that you've got here. I'll start by saying it does suffer from one large problem here and that's the lack of paragraphing. It is currently one giant wall of text that really doesn't work well for reading. The flow is surprisingly stable despite the odd formatting but I think even then splitting this up into at least three paragraphs would be a good idea here.
Moving past that little issue with paragraphing this is actually a rather strong piece here. We've got some very strong words coming across there. Its such a simple message in terms of what its trying to say here but you do a really good of bringing it all to life there. You manage to bring across a very uplifting tone there and get us to really feel this urge and excitement that the person saying this appears to have and well that sheer conviction and desire are really felt here. Those words really manage to get us invested too in terms of what could be behind something like this.
Overall, besides that little issue on the paragraphing this is a surprisingly powerful piece that even despite being a little harder to read brings its message across really well.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.