Wow I really like this. At first I was just thinking in my head you shouldn't live life thinking 'If I never' type of thing. But the ending completely changed my perspective. Being the romantic sap that I am I thought that this poem was great. One point I really liked was that you kept with the same theme through out your poem with the 'If I never' and 'I would of' I didn't get the title at the beginning but after reading I got it and thought that it was really clever. I always like that titles that end up clicking in the end or at one point in the writing because it makes them feel more accomplishing for both reader and writer but it makes it fun. One thing that could potentially change depending on your perspective of it would change "I would of never" to "I would have never" I don't know if that makes much of a difference but just an idea. Anyways great job!
Keep up the lovely writing!
-Roxie Rain
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