Young Writers Society

Hi! This is my first review so sorry if it seems slightly flung together.
I would just like to start off by saying that this poem is really good. Just putting that forward! It sounds almost as chaotic as my life! Metaphor after Metaphor! fab. I wish that I could find something constructive to say. Hmm... I suppose that the whole poem is a bit confusing at first and you really have to look at it in depth to understand it. Amazingly dark and so deep. I love it! I really have very few bad things to say about it! I hope you write more because you have real potential. Thank you.

Heya, Rach! I see you've posted another! Congrats! How are you finding the site?
Anyway- To the review!
First off- this is very different from your other poem! I like!
The same first though, though. Capitalization!
Though- I have to say- you fixed your punctuation! Good job! I'm proud!
The first thought I had about the context of the poem was this,"Wow."
I honestly love the poem.
One line in the first stanza kinda gnawed at me, though.
"Some dark... Others darker." Gah, this line kills me xD. I mean- technically it is correct, but I wasn't expecting it to be darker- I was expecting it to be something like,"Brighter," but that's what I get for reading it like it's my own!
Next though- it doesn't rhyme. I like that,. I couldn't write a free verse poem if you forced me to- so it's refreshing to see that other people can. I honestly find rhyme easier than free verse for some reason- apparently it's supposed to be easier? I don't know- I guess that depends on thee person/author in question.
My next thought was about the last line-"Closing my identity behind shutters of dilemma." I understand that,"dilemma," is a hard/impossible choice... But I kind of wanted to know what it was, like for it to be continued and such.
I really don't know what to say- free verse isn't my style, so I'll leave you with that.
Keep writing!
Sincerely- Matthew Casanova Aaron