1-26-06
i have been to the dockets
i have trodden through flame,
i have felt the lowest fire
just to rise up again.
i see through you, mr. mundane
i am a writer,
passion; life’s game.
i have burnt like a rocket
scarred the people scared
i twist with life’s river,
my propaganda has blared.
I have controlled minds.
I am a pervert of power, I am
a fallen God.
And i found mother God in winter
in spicy burn, in swords china made
tm, in a delicate chemical society
and in razor-quick moments of Drama.
I have torn off clothing
fucked with pure glee
exploded, caressed,
burnt
corroded, repressed
my violence rains down
blow to blow, and welt to welt
I bleed on bitter night,
I am cold when I feel this Godhood, it is like
methamphetamine.
I have inhaled the puffs
that caused bloody wars,
and I hold this shiny head
that finds the time to throb
in neuronal firing pain (rhyme).
But
In one dream, the stars become one
and i stare until the world dissolves
i’m naked before the eyes of infinity
and i soar into an orange and naked future.
In one dream, the stars become one
and worlds leak from pens from words
and i soar free of history forever.
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the format really didn't get translated well, that annoys me. Tabs don't really seem to have a place in HTML.
Wow! you put great images into your writing, which makes it very appealing to the reader! ummmm, you might want to check and make sure that you are capitalizing your I's...other than that...I was blown away!