Young Writers Society

Hey, Princess!

I'm too lazy to open another window, so your review will be in one ginormous quote! Lol- Did you know spell check recognizes ginormous?

Anyway...

On with the review!

Train tracks rambling beneath him, First of all, I think you meant "rumbling". Also, I personally believe this is too cute of a way to start an essay. Abraham Lincoln wrote the short two hundred and forty three word speech that would take the world to where it was today. Upon arriving to Gettysburg, Lincoln took his seat and watched while Edward Everett gave his voicing and thoughts through a two hour long speech. Once Everett was finished, Lincoln took the stand.

The dedication of the Soldiers’ National Cemetery was going to be famous. That was why the president himself had come to dedicate it. He was supposed to honor the soldiers with his speech and his presence, but Lincoln had something else in mind. He talked about when the country was first revolutionized and freed from England’s grasp, and he added a quote from the Declaration of Independence.

“…all men are created equal”

In this, he was referring to the real reason why this war was being fought:

Equality. No, the Civil War was fought for state's rights...?

Lincoln continued with honoring the brave soldiers and offering the land to them as their own. But then, he spoke out against himself and entertained the notion that the soldiers had honored themselves and the land. Yes, they were very important, but there were bigger matters to face. The people had to take interest in the living and defend themselves. The dead would have died for nothing if the people of the North did not get up and fight for their freedom and their rights. The recipients to the speech sat in stunned silence. Do you know for a fact that they were stunned? Use quotes by people who heard the Gettysburg Address

Every word that was uttered applies to the modern Americans, too. It was as if Lincoln’s speech was a metaphor for the future. Everyday Americans dwell on the past. We are consumed with what happened and why it had happened. We follow what others did with a passion. Use examples. Tell us how you came to form this opinion.Americans need to get up lol, Joe Biden moment here. If you heard that speech...and lock their minds and souls on the present, and on what is to come. Are you saying the past is unimportant? I would argue differently.

AndDo not start a sentence with and. this applies to Iraq, also. 2,873 good young people have died there. Many wives and children are left home, alone without their husbands, or fathers. They’re deeply hurt when they find out that they have lost someone so dear to them. Often, they go into a deep depression.You use the word deep several times here. Also, I think it's kind of obvious that they are depressed when they here their father died... That’s not what our deceased soldiers would want. They would have wanted us to keep our chins up and look to the future, and aim in winning this warHow do you know? Is this essay supposed to be your personal opinion?, even if they are not there to guide us along the way.

Americans can’t change what had happened, nor can we reverse it.I would argue differently. All that is in our power relies upon the present and the future. Bitter hearts and souls torn are left to die in what has been. The world shall not follow that path.

We have to face the future, head on. We must learn from our past mistakes, and our past fears, and correct the mistakes and tackle those fears. Understanding the past may be an American goal, but tackling the future is a dream, worth living up to. Tackling the future is the most difficult thing that anybody could ever do. Getting married, having children, raising children, and earning money are all a part of the dream, and when you complete that dream, you will be the happiest anybody has ever been.


“It is rather for us, the living, we here be dedicated to the great task remaining before us -- that, from these honored dead we take increased devotion to that cause for which they here, gave the last full measure of devotion -- that we here highly resolve these dead shall not have died in vain; that the nation, shall have a new birth of freedom, and that government of the people by the people for the people, shall not perish from the earth.”-Abraham Lincoln, 1863.