Young Writers Society

I like it. Not bad. I had some trouble understanding it at first, but after the third time over I got it. The main thing that jumped out at me was the main topic: someone being what they're not, realizing that's not what they want, wanting to change but can't, right (or something like that)? If I'm wrong, I'm sorry, but that's what I got from it. I like how you wrote in the second person. Usually in pieces that are short and dramatic as so, I tend to see first and third persons. Well done to you, and to your poem well written. Five out of ten stars from the Black Sheep.
Postscript - "your invisible" is supposed to be "you're invisible"

its alright i liked the first verse very intresting

people cry
people try,to become perfect
people die
but you feel insignifigant

i was thinking instead of insignifigant i would put something else instead to make it flow more
thats if you want to anyway

but than you cant

It's pretty, and halfway deep. I liked it.

odd spell check should of picted that up and farsle is fake, not real etc.

Ok,not bad!!

Why is it Farse??

You've a few spelling errors like:
insignifigant??
inconsibable ??