Hey Plume!
That's. So. Creepy! I'm usually not into horror, and I think I do like this script because of the fact the scary part comes in the end, when you're the most interested to understand what is the twist. It's less scary (which is great for a coward like me), and more surprising, or spooky. In a way, I also find it funny! And if I get all of these different emotions from that script, it means youv'e done your job.
I like how Stranger 2 is impatient and wants Stranger 1 to live him alone already; it's very relatable and makes an amusing-akward sort of vibe.
I do have one note:
So we get Stranger 2 is annoyed by Stranger 1. He's clearly forcing himself to be nice. When Stranger 1 suggests he should go to the beach, Stranger 2 weirdly "obeys" him very quickly, with no time to consider it. He doesn't has to have a whole dilemma about it, because their dialogue is already long enough, but I'd put in a little more of him thinking about it. Even a short directing note will do!
Your'e creative and talented, great job!!
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