Is this a kind of dream,
Santa floating down from the sky,
Following Roudolf right down the street,
Is what Im seeing correct, or, is it a dream?
There's a spooky fog along the horizon,
And strange glow in the sky,
When ever I ask whats happened, no body knows
And what It means means
Oh, its a dream.
Santa,
Stopped christmas forever.
Christmas,
Im so lost without you
How can the thing that made me so happy
Suddenly just stop?
Christmas.
Theres a strange sort of shadow,
Reaching into the sky,
Flailing right about our heads,
What does this mean? Oh, I hope It's a dream.
There's high wind in the trees,
A cold shout in the air,
Everyones hearts just stopped
What will we do?
Oh, Im lost without you.
Santa,
stopped christmas forever.
Christmas,
Im so lost without you
How can the thing that made me so happy
Suddenly just stop?
Christmas.
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Jingle bells,
Snoopy my dog smell,
Mums got loose teeth,
My goldfish died,
My cousin cried
And my auntie was angry.
I was running through the snow,
Then I played with clay,
Then I saw a big fat man running away.
I sat down and watched Twilight then Harry Potter too.
Then my granddad had a big poo,
It stunk up the whole house,
We went and sat outside,
my uncle Jack got frost bite (the irony!).
Floralys soft white tissues are a big fat lie.
I made a dubstep song and band I named it Bonkers and friends- Wob WobWobWob.
I opened some presents,
I got guitar hero,
I failed at that and became a master at air guitar,
I learnt to play Bohimian Rhapsody, I wanted to join Queen,
When I found out they broke up I was so angry,
I think I'd be good,
Better yet, awesome.
I think im gonna break into dubstep now Woooooobbbbwobwobwob Rhapsody wooooobbbbwobwob no more teeth wooooobwobwob smelly dog wooooobbwobwob new goldfish named Roger wooobwobwobwobwob break down dundundun dundedundun.
I think I better stop there,
happy new year oh and next year if you see a fat man tell him merry christmas from the queen of air guitars AKA me.
Ahaha! Congratulations on winning in the lyrics contest. I love the wobwobwob christmas!
Hey, Bonkers!
Okay, so first song!
I actually really like this, and I can imagine this being a song - just a few nitpicks.
"Is this a kind of dream,
Santa floating down from the sky,
Following Roudolf right down the street,
Is what Im seeing correct, or, is it a dream?"
For some reason, this doesn't flow correctly to me, I feel as if it's because you mention that fact that you are unsure that it's a dream or not, twice. I also think that the first line should end with a question mark.
I'm also 'Roudolf' isn't spelt correctly, but I don't know how to spell it myself.
'Im' should be 'I'm'
And "correct, or, is it a dream?" rid of the comma after 'or', if you want to add suspense I say add an ellipsis.
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In the second verse, you spell nobody as no body - there's no need for a space.
You should also insert a comma between 'means means'
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Other than you make the same mistake it 'Im' further down, everything else seems fine. I really like this.
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Onto your second song, is this supposed to be rap? I don't know - the way it's structure d seems like it should be some form of festive rap. Also, is it supposed the be in the tune to jingle bells?
There isn't much to pick at, if anything it makes me laugh! I especially like the dubstep part. Well done, and keep writing!
~ Redvine.
Hey! Funny works, Bonkers
All that musical stuff made my head whirl! I know commenting on them would be out of place and all, but I'll just give a short and simple review, just for future reference 
So first, kudos to you for your witty rhymes! The first lyrics, Santa in the Sky is a curious one; it tended to describe how Santa was seen hovering above everyone in the sky. Yes, you did the rhymes best, but it seems that you focused too much on it that you forgot to interconnect the stanzas to create a more concrete idea.
Those stanzas up there, for example, were not that inter-lined with each other. The interjection of 'I'm lost without you' may have stopped the descriptive sense of the piece. There are a few verses too which were a bit out of place with the rest of the lines like what I've mentioned. Just make sure to check up on them
On the second one, well, it's a bit cluttered...but I think all that mess makes up the whole sense of the piece which, I think, is more random than ever. I think 'wob', though, is not necessary to be put in words
Well, that's all! Good luck with your future funny pieces
Your pal,
Al