Published January 9, 2008
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Indebted for the critique and the advice, as always, Jasmine--thank you, thank you!
I really like it.Your imagery is beautiful, and I love how you tell the story. I love;
"The spring snowed in its own way
and pollen dusted her hair yellow."
I'd change the last "up" to "upwards" as I think it sounds more natural, and I'd extend the last sentence as I don't think it sounds finished. I'd specify what has been plucked.
I like the simplicity of the last line.
A really lovely poem overall.