Published August 15, 2011
I am wind.
Moving so swiftly accross the world,
Imprinting who I am everywhere I go.
I am wind.
You see me in different seasons,
Acting so animatedly,
Dancing all over the world,
Pulling others along with me.
I am wind.
My powers lie within my body,
Captivating all those around me.
I am wind.
You see me moving in so many different ways,
Changing to fit the mood,
The way I am,
My personality.
I am wind.
The way I act only amplifies my passion,
My enthusiasm for the life I live.
I am wind.
When you look at me you see my feelings,
Emotions coursing through the smoke,
That fill my heart,
And shape who I am.
I am wind.
Dancing over the earth around me,
Being as I'll never be again,
I am wind.
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Hey Passion,
I dig it. Your poem is pretty. I do think you mention " around the world, earth ect..." to many times. I only caught one error:
It was pretty. You do need to watch how long your lines are, to keep the rhythm intact.
That's all!
PM me or post on my wall if you have any questions!
-Boo
Hi there!
Wow...this is really good! I enjoyed it very much. There's great imagery. It's written very well; your grammer and spelling are perfect. It flows really well too. There's only one thing I have to correct about this.
This line sounds better without the word 'so'. It flows better.
Again, this was a great poem. Keep writing!