Young Writers Society

Hey, I am here to give you a short review. Hope it helps.
1) You entirely fed off of Romeo and Juliet! Apollo and Nyx love each other but can not but doesn't care and love each other any way is totally Romeo and Juliet.

2) The ability to create irony out of such a type of poem is incredible. The ironic element being Apollo and Nyx being two completely opposite in every way, but were still able to find love. You explained this clearly in the third stanza:

Unnatural was their love to everyone else, yet it felt
so right for them. They were not bothered by the hate
everyone held in their hearts, because their love is
and will always be stronger than the strongest hatred.

Nothing stopped them, not even the threat of death
hanging over their heads. Not even the loss of all their
power they possessed and their immortality, being stripped
from them, severed their bond or interfered in their amorous alliance.

I absolutely loved your poem and as somehow mesmerized by it. It sounds so adventurous and yet it has a hint of the hardships that they faced. It was a very good poem really. But you could have made it better by not using the italics as it is something unusual although i have no problem with it but using the regular font would have made it look more organised?? Well anyway, my favorite was the first stanza. After reading the first line I wanted to read the rest of it. It is a good thing actually that is to be able to attract the readers and I say that your poem is very good indeed. Keep writing.

Hi Pandorax, I'm Day and I'm here to review your poem!

I absolutely loved this piece! I'm a big fan of Greek/Roman mythology (thank you, Rick Riordan, for introducing me to that ) and I'll be the first one to admit that I've never thought of putting Apollo and Nyx together.

They are polar opposites, one being the god of the sun, healing, poetry, music etc. etc. and the other the goddess of darkness and night. Ideally they should be mortal enemies, since the sun chases away the night, to put it poetically, but hey, opposites attract, right?

This topic was kind of cliché because the whole we're-forbidden-from-loving-each-other-because-it's-unnatural-but-who-cares-we're-going-to-do-it-anyway-because-we-love-each-other is highly reminiscent of Romeo and Juliet, and even though I haven't read the play, their love strikes me as lust. Though that obviously isn't the case here. And the good part is that no one's ever mixed this concept with Greek mythology before! I like that.

I think that the lines could be a little shorter, they're a bit too long for a poem. But otherwise, you've portrayed everything very nicely, even though it was short. The inevitable strife that erupts in Olympus and the indifference of the two lovers is cool. I just think that this was going a little overboard:

Nothing stopped them, not even the threat of death
hanging over their heads. Not even the loss of all their
power they possessed and their immortality, being stripped
from them, severed their bond or interfered in their amorous alliance.