Let's dance, let's dance

by PandaAiKorai

  • Poetry
  • Lyrical

Published February 10, 2011

In Poetry

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Let's dance, let's dance.
Give me a chance
to hold you close to me.

This night so young,
where we feel one,
swinging to this melody.

My arms tighter,
your eyes wider
in the dead of night.

Leave you breathless
with just one kiss
under the moonlight.

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crestfallen
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crestfallen commented Comment · Feb 11, 2011

Hmm, I did't really like it that much. It was kind of juvenile coming from an 18 year old. Sorry

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IcyFlame
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IcyFlame wrote a review Review · Feb 10, 2011

I like it! Short but sweet, sorry if that sounded clique but it's true. It reads very well and i like the rhyming structure, it's very consistant. I take it you know breathless and kiss don't rhyme? This isn't a problem unless it was being read out though.
You're not a terrible poet, don't be so hard on yourself! Anyone can write, but you have to enjoy it :)
Happy writing



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