Ellie here for a quick review! I hope you are having a great day, friend Let's get right into the review!
And human beings seem o look
Like pathetic Angels,
Did you mean to say, 'to look'? Maybe just a little type that I noticed!
Trying desperately to free themselves,
From the pleasures and burdens
Of life.
I really liked this phrase. I love how you did not just say burden, sins, evil, etc, but you also included pleasures. Pleasures are normally associated with good, so this really stood out to me. This seems like a very deeply thought-out poem, i love it!
Much like the noble, but sad and poignant
Orangutan
Who looks out from the jungle trees,
With eyes that know,
Like a pathetic Human Being.
But with arms that remind her,
That she will always be tied to the trees.
The title of this poem stood out to me right away, because I LOVE animals I love how you use the orangutan in this piece. I wonder, why did you capitalize the words Human Being here? Capitalization is often for titles, like God, or a leader. Was this done on purpose, maybe to show the superiority of humans over animals?
I found this poem quite lovely. You touch on angels, man, animals, and so much of our world. I love seeing how you tie these together. It feels like this poem could be part of a larger story or universe you have created because of how much detail. As well as the capitalizations you use.
Either way, awesome job
Keep writing! Your friend,
Ellie
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