Published January 31, 2009
On the verge of psychosis - I constantly lay
To my wrath and disdain - you shall obey
A haughty ,subsequently proud display
Myself I enlarge , adorn and array
Inferior, thou enemies shall become
Degraded, debased and immensly dumb
I shall deprive the poor and endow the rich
It is my constant, obstinate itch
Unterfrau and untermensch,
I smell a reek, repugnant stench
My ego and might have a constant dance
I will have my vengence in pomp and circumstance.
Reproving, rebuking constantly attack
I will arise an Otzmatron and never retract.
The need to conduct and submit me to your relief
I shall ascend and mock your pitiful disbelief.
Reluctant to face the error of your ways,
It matters not , this world I plan to amaze.
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Fixed. Anything else you Yank?
By the way, fixation, or "fixations" is irrelevant , not the word you were looking for.
One new word, commas!!!!
Beneath me thou enemies shall become
Makes no sense whatsoever.
So, all this really needs is a few punctuation fixations
I do enjoy it, great subject.
You have potential!.