really amazing just mind blowing!
Dont make a sound,
Dont try to move around.
Just sit back and listen to the whipser in the wind.
To your best friend,
To your lover till the end.
Just open up your heart and you'll see me again.
Cause I'm singing to you,
Cause there's nothing else to do.
There's nothing to lose,
Nothing to prove.
And nothing's gone.
So I'm singing to you,
Cause there's nothing else I wanna do.
There's nothing gone,
Nothing's wrong,
It's just my song.
And I'm singing to you.
Now did you hear,
My voice so near.
Did you hear it fluttering inside your open heart.
And could you see,
Me laying here waiting.
For you to come and lay down in my arms.
Cause I'm singing to you,
Cause there's nothing else to do.
There's nothing to prove,
Nothing to lose,
And nothing's gone.
So I'm singing to you,
Cause there's nothing else I wanna do.
There's nothing gone,
Nothing's wrong,
It's just my song.
And I'm singing to, you.
Is my voice not true for you,
When it says that it's in love.
With the angel that was sent to me,
Falling from up above.
Well I'm gonna tell you something,
There's more that meets the eye.
I'm not just saying that I just miss you,
I'm saying, I'll love you till I die.
So I'm singing to you,
Cause there's nothing else to do.
There's nothing to lose,
Nothing to prove.
And nothing's gone.
So I'm singing to you,
Cause there's nothing else I wanna do,
There's nothing gone,
Nothing wrong,
It's just my song.
...
And it's all about you!
And how I feel about you!
There's nothing to lose,
Nothing to prove,
And nothing's gone!
Yeah it's all about you!
And what I wanna say to you!
I love you,
Yes I do,
It's all true!
I Love you.
...
There's more to say,
Than just I love you.
But they're the only words I have,
At the moment...
And I'll sing them to... you.
That was really amazing poem. Just period no "if, ands or butts". I think it's amazing how i could so seeing you having your guitar out and singing this poem. (not that i know how to turn a poem into a song xD ) Anyways i hope you continue writing great poems. *thumbs up*
Hi there!
Sorry this review is going to be short because I have to go out for dinner.
Firstly I loved the flow and simplicity of this. The lines where short but you could see them in a song and they got right down to the meaning which I loved. It was a beautiful song, and it was made by the simplicity if it. Almost like a simple scrawled love note on a spare piece of paper.
Nothing to comment about grammar.
My favorite part;
So I'm singing to you,
Cause there's nothing else to do.
There's nothing to lose,
Nothing to prove.
Beautiful and it flowed and rhymed really well.
Overall it was a beautiful simple song.
Keep up the good work;
LGF
My first comment: Beautiful song. The song is beautiful in a whole. My favorite verse was the chorus, and the last line. " And I'll sing them to... you." The only mistake I found was you occasionally started sentences with And. Its not correct grammar, but for the purpose of a song it works. That's all I can really say without repeating what I previously said.
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Well this was a lovely piece about true love. I enjoyed it thoroughly the who time. I didn't quite get your rhythm or rhyme scheme, although for the most part it still flowed well. Your rhymes didn't seems forced. And all the repetitive lines really fit the tone of the poem. One of my favorite parts was:
Well I'm gonna tell you something,
There's more that meets the eye.
I'm not just saying that I just miss you,
I'm saying, I'll love you till I die.
Those were the most powerful words in the poem, as far as I am concerned. Your truth and story and point about this poem was lovely. I think it is a great tribute to anyone who you miss that you loved, whether it was a lover, or a grandparent, or a sibling. Obviously the words would have to be changed a little bit, but the core of this poem is fantastic!
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