Published October 30, 2011
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I really like this, i love how you never really find out what has actually happened to the woman, and it let's my mind wander. The ending is so original and it's such a twist to what i would have ever imagined. I really enjoyed this piece, and I really want to see some more of you work
That was amazing. What I really liked was the way you ended it by revealing the beauty of the moth. Also, you had a sort of twist or some image change. I don't know how to describe it but your description had me thinking that these two men were going to try to fight or just try to get this woman but you managed to change it somehow. I know it's confusing but try to get what I mean. I like how you have the speaker as a moth because no one would expect that. Good job and keep writing.