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First, i love the title of this article. Though your examples do not reach out to everyone who might read in practical terms, its still a good attempt.

To the author: Nice work, but put more effort in your writing. You are on the path to success as a writer if you don't give up.

About the article: It could not have been better. The title is captivating and almost self-explanatory. I love the issue this article addresses.

Of a truth, many desire greatness, not of themselves but of others. In the pursuit to be like already made legends and success stories, many of use lose ourselves in the process and eventually achieve below our ability.

With much said - i am glad this issue has been addressed.

Hi1 I liked this article as it addressed one of the most important issues in our society nowadays. People are constantly trying to portray and mimic their supposed role models and are oblivious of the significance of their own identity.
However, I feel you should have began this article with a more .....eye catching start. Something that intrigues the reader immediately. But good attempt!

Hi, Noselay. My name is Solvy and I'm here to review your essay.

I really like Wilde's quote, and how you attempt to use as the main point of your essay, as it is a very powerful phrase. However, although I like what I see in this pot, I believe your essay is still somewhat raw, as it doesn't thoroughly convince me as a reader. When it comes to the content, you mention that there is evidence that states that people who don't feel confident enough tend to change or pretend they're something they're not to meet social expectations, but you never mention why they shouldn't.

You do mention the pros of being authentic, as you say getting to know oneself is fulfilling... But you never mention the cons and serious consequences teenagers and young adults face when they try to fit into a stereotype.

Here's my suggestion on how to organize your poem.

-Explain the problem, along with evidence/quotes. I think you've got most of this done. Your opinions and explanations are absent though.

-Develop further: why is the problem actually a problem? Anyone could start a debate saying that if you do what people expect you to do and become what people expect to see, you would be happier, as most would accept you. Go a little deeper and explain how this is not so. How will it affect you on the long run to change in order to be accepted?

-Explain what are the benefits of finding yourself in a society that is passionate about stereotypes. How will it benefit you, personally, to stay true to yourself? Explain how does your essay relate to Wilde's quote? What do you think he means by "Be yourself, everyone elsethe is taken?". Gotta be fair with this fine thinker, hahah So, make him proud. ^_^

Last but not least, I would suggest noy to write an essay in second person. As in, don't speak directly to your reader. Why? Because it can be a touching topic, and it can feel a little judgemental at times, which is bad for an essay with a good purpose such as yours.

Have fun! And keep writing~

-Solvy

Hello there!

You have some extensive reviews already, so I hope I do not repeat anything they might have said.

Second paragraph, first sentence: "concerned of" should be "concerned about".

Other than that, I feel like your article is a bit too short, and could have used some more arguments and elaboration. You could have given arguments about why people lack confidence in expressing themselves in general, or what is the result of that lack of confidence. You could have said something like:
"People make their words go through a filter before they come out of their mouths because they are afraid of saying something that would make others dislike them or even laugh at them. That significantly reduces the palette of sentences they are able to put together."

That's pretty much what I though I had to say that was not already said. Anyway, welcome to the Young Writers Society. I'm sure that you will improve significantly in time. I hope this helps!

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Salutations.

Ah, it's always a pleasure to see a new member dive into the world of literature, especially here, on the Young Writers Society. I see you have been welcomed warmly, so I shall skip that and continue straight with the review.

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Blue - removal

Having your own personality is something very special. Be a Fruit Loop, as the world is full of Cheerios.

From Oscar Wilde said “Be yourself, everyone else is already taken,” which means people basically should be themselves (or you might say they should be authentic).

But how often do people do not have the confidence to say something or express their true personality?

People are not confident enough to say something or do something due to the fact that one is usually concerned of how they will be perceived.

If one is not confident enough, one is unable to live to fulfill one's deepest passions, desires and their beliefs; however, it is not that easy.

Having the courage and dedication to acknowledge and be proud of one’s embarrassments, feelings, emotions, dreams, desires and beliefs.

Evidence has shown in High school boys in high school who have feelings for girls although they do not have the confidence to express themselves. For example, you found an intelligent and beautiful girl and you find her very attractive but you do not feel you're good enough for her. So you decide to become more attractive. Maybe you try to workout more, although you aren’t really that sporty. This example strongly relates to how people don’t truly express themselves, though they should express their true feelings.

To conclude, “Be yourself, everyone else is already taken,” it advises to be more authentic, by acknowledging and appreciating your real thoughts, feelings, emotions, desires, passions, embarrassments and beliefs.

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Hey there! Welcome to YWS. I hope you enjoy your stay

This is a nice little essay you have here. It's very meaningful and has a strong point. However - it's a bit cliche. Not story cliche, but the topic. Everyone writes about being yourself, so how can yours be any different? Add more cool, catching phrases, spice it up a bit. For example:

Be a fruit loop as the world is full of Cheerios.

Evidence has shown in High school

So you find her very attractive but you do not feel your good enough for her.

Man, this is great, let me start. I like the way you compared a fruit loop to cheerios, as everyone else is, just like everyone else, it kind of says to me, be yourself, don't be like everyone else, and I like that, because that's why I grew my hair out, to show I'm different from the guys at my school, and they all see me differently from the others.

Confidence and social standards, I want people to be themselves instead of following some damn social standards. If you aren't confident or brave you cannot reach what you truly want in life.

It just kind of tells me, live life the way you want to, and if your deepest desire is to be watching Doctor Who with a jar of Nutella beside you, go for it!

I agree very strongly with you on this, and I love it, you have a very right vision, you see what's really happening.

I didn't have any problems with this, but I give you 1,000,000 likes my friend, and I will stalk you to the end of my days on Yws, which will probably be never. Keep up the good work!