The Consequences

by NoOneInParticular

Published June 14, 2024

12+

In A kingdom of dust and flames

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Based on my poem, “ Whatever happened to this place?” If you’re feeling confused or just want more context, feel free to check it out!
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The wind howled in the distance. A thin veil of smoke cloaked the air, as flames licked the sides of buildings, crackling softly. It almost felt…peaceful.

(If one strained their ears, they could hear the lamentations of those trapped and injured, beseeching aid.)

How curious, that he now chose to focus on his surroundings, just as he was about to confront the one who had razed the kingdom.

The Destroyer, they called him. And there he stood, on the precipice, overlooking the ruin below.

“Beautiful, is it not?” the figure murmured, hands clasped behind his back.

Emerald tightened his grip on his sword. How could one perceive such devastation as beautiful? Even when he had trodden a darker path, he had never taken delight in destruction for its own sake.

He stepped forward. “Who are you? Why did you wreak this devastation?”

The Destroyer hummed, his back still turned. “Oh, me?” He turned around, placing a hand on his chest and extending the other in a grand gesture.

Emerald gasped. This…could not be.

Hector?/The Destroyer bowed, a maniacal grin spreading across his face. “I am the Bringer of Death, the Emissary of the End. And what I offer is mercy.”

“But…why? How can this be mercy?” Emerald’s voice faltered. His mind whirled—none of this felt real.

Hector’s smile twisted into a grotesque parody of what it once was. His warm cerulean eyes were now cold, one black and one white. He was their Saviour, his brother (though now estranged). How had it come to this?

He maintained that unsettling smile, as if all was well. “To live is to suffer. But I, The Emissary, offer an escape. We all must perish in the end, but why not hasten the process…hmm?”

Emerald was struck dumb. “You…”

“Tsk, tsk. I have a name, you know? It’s The Emissary.”

This felt…eerily familiar.

“Can none of you address me by my true name? It is Emerald.”

As if reading his thoughts, Hector remarked, “Familiar, is it not?”

A bolt of realization struck him. Visions of the day he clashed with his brother, after he had lost his memory, flooded his mind.

“Oh, me? One of Lord Alistair’s finest soldiers, The Ivy Knight, at your service. But just Emerald will suffice.”

He had once served Lord Alistair, who sought the world’s end, just as Hector did now.

To him, his brother had become something unrecognizable, so far removed from the man he once knew.

(Had he felt as Emerald did now, shocked and confounded?)

Hector sighed, seemingly indifferent to Emerald’s turmoil. “Fortunately, or rather unfortunately, I still retain my memories. Some may have faded, but the crucial ones remain, I believe.” He tapped his chin thoughtfully. “Perhaps I should rectify that. Oh well!”

Behind him, hurried footsteps echoed on the stone. The princess appeared, her usual flowing dress replaced with more practical attire. A spear was strapped to her back. “I came as swiftly as I could after evacuating everyone. Is all well—” She stopped, clearly recognizing the figure before them.

“Ah, Princess Diana. How good of you to join us. We were just discussing the kingdom’s predicament. Perfectly normal, I assure you.” Hector gave her what he likely considered a welcoming smile.

It only sent chills down his spine.

Princess Diana approached him. “Hector—”

“The Emissary of the End,” he corrected, “but just The Emissary will suffice.”

She ignored his amendment. “Hector, what madness has possessed you? Did you cause all this?”

“What do you think?” Hector tilted his head. “Oh, and before I forget. Princess, perhaps you should inspect the state of the cells? Prison is dreadfully dull, and one could easily lose their mind therein.” His grin widened at his words.

“Hector, your brother is present! Do you care nothing for him? Do you not consider what he must think of you now?” Princess Diana gestured to Emerald, as if to underscore her point.

“My brother?” His smile tightened, and his body began to tremble. For a fleeting moment, Emerald swore he saw Hector’s eyes flash blue. “Aeneas is dead! He cannot think anything of me, for he does not exist! He perished the day he forgot everything, including himself. Did you not say so yourself, Emerald? What were your words? ‘I cannot pretend to be someone I am not?’”

Emerald’s heart skipped a beat. All of this felt wrong. He was at a loss for words and actions. Did Hector still regard him as his brother?

Hector…it was best to think of him as The Emissary now.

Hector The Emissary exhaled deeply, his voice softening as his gaze momentarily gentled. “Fret not, Emerald. I had ample time to ponder it. I have made my peace.”

Emerald had the distinct sense that he had not.

“I apologize for getting carried away.” The Emissary cleared his throat. “Now, do lengthy monologues not bore you? I trust you do not object, for I have taken the liberty to prepare something special for you.”

With a wave of his hand, the ground trembled, and glass walls surrounded Emerald. He was imprisoned!

Emerald struck the walls of his glass prison, even attempting to shatter them with his sword, but to no avail. The glass was impervious.

He glanced at Princess Diana, who was similarly trapped. After a futile attempt to break free, she shook her head. No success there either.

“Tada!” The Emissary raised his arms theatrically. “How do you like it? The monologue, the surprise twist…it is my first attempt!”

He chuckled to himself. “And best of all, you have front-row seats to the end of the world! A true classic!”

The Emissary laughed. “Oh…dear, dear brother. I shall bring the world to you.”

“Hector!—”

A whoosh, and he was gone.

The Emissary never heard his cry.

Behind the barrier, Emerald met Diana’s gaze, tears threatening to fall. Was this truly the end?

The wind howled in the distance. There they stood, trapped on the precipice, forced to witness the kingdom’s demise. It almost felt…peaceful, if one ignored the devastation.

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If you’re here, thanks for reading…whatever this ridiculously long thing is. Feedback and critique is very much appreciated. Hope you have a nice day/night ahead!

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TheRebel2007
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TheRebel2007 wrote a review Review · Jun 14, 2024

Hey there! Rebel here for a short review!

This was an interesting read. I checked out the poem to understand Hector/The Emissary's backstory and it was a tragic one. The Emissary was the Saviour who saved the world/kingdom from a dark force - and perhaps Hector's brother was part of the force (perhaps headed by Lord Alistair who was served by Emerald AKA the Ivy Knight AKA Hector's brother). Also, the poem reminds me of Robert Browing's "The Patriot" where the Patriot (a person highly exalted and celebrated by the people) was falsely accused of treason and then sentenced to death.

Also, even if the story is read as a singular piece, i.e., it makes for an extremely interesting read. Of course, the Saviour's backstory as someone good being turned into someone horrible due to the extremely horrifying conditions of the prison and the greed of a malicious man will not be understood - yet, it will still be a good read.

[quote=NoOneInParticular]Hector?/The Destroyer bowed, a maniacal grin spreading across his face. “I am the Bringer of Death, the Emissary of the End. And what I offer is mercy.”[/quote]

I think there should have been an paragraph gap after Hector? and before "The Destroyer" - it looks better that way.

[quote=NoOneInParticular]He chuckled to himself. “And best of all, you have front-row seats to the end of the world! A true classic!”

The Emissary laughed. “Oh…dear, dear brother. I shall bring the world to you.”[/quote]

I think that "The Emissary laughed" should have been in the same paragraph as the previous dialogue, as it is a continuation of the previous dialogue and said by the same person.

Anyway, that's all. It was a great read. Keep writing! :p

P.S.: This review is brought to you by Team Tortoise.

Thanks for the review! I agree, breaking it into two paragraphs would look better, as well as putting %u201CThe Emissary laughed%u201D in the same paragraph.

Emerald AKA the Ivy Knight AKA Hector's brother

This part made me burst out laughing, as I realised just how many titles I assigned to my characters. Whoops?

Glad you enjoyed, and cheers to you too!

Also you got the backstory right. I was worried it%u2019d be confusing, so I%u2019m glad you got it!

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EllieMae
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EllieMae wrote a review Review · Jun 14, 2024

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Well hello there, friend *waves*! Ellie here to leave you a review on this lovely piece. Let's get right into it:

The wind howled in the distance. A thin veil of smoke cloaked the air, as flames licked the sides of buildings, crackling softly. It almost felt…peaceful.

(If one strained their ears, they could hear the lamentations of those trapped and injured, beseeching aid.)


To begin, I love the different types of description you use in your writing. You describe the wind as howling. This is assigning a characteristic that is more human or animal like to the wind. I love how you did that because it is so much easier to imagine what this is sounding like because of these words. You also use describing words related to size, like describing the thin veil of smoke. And then you use a visual by describing it as cloaking over the air, with flames licking the sides. How beautiful is this! I love you detailed you are in this piece.

Emerald tightened his grip on his sword. How could one perceive such devastation as beautiful? Even when he had trodden a darker path, he had never taken delight in destruction for its own sake.


I also enjoyed how you ask questions in this piece. It really makes me feel like I am being spoken to, directly. As if it is asking me, "How can this possibly be beautiful?". What a lovely way to phrase that sentence too!

Hector?/The Destroyer bowed, a maniacal grin spreading across his face. “I am the Bringer of Death, the Emissary of the End. And what I offer is mercy.”


There is a / the should not be between Hector? and The Destroyer. I also recommend using italics on mercy instead of bolding. Those are the biggest things that stood out to me, but overall I enjoyed this plot and vivid descriptions that you use in your writing!!

Hope to read more soon. Keep writing!

Your friend,
Ellie :D

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Thank you! Now that I look at it, it would be better to not have the slash between the two names and break then up into two paragraphs. Unfortunately, this is a short story and I don%u2019t think I%u2019ll be writing any more for this particular storyline. Thanks again and cheers to you!



A classic is a book which people praise and don't read.
— Mark Twain