My Addiction
It’s heavy.
I can’t get over it.
Every time I see you, I feel better. But at the same time, I feel as if I have to barf, the nervousness over powering me.
I shiver, shiver like crazy.
I ignore the fact you’re there, but I know you are.
My friends, they don’t know anything.
I cover myself with that act, the act that I’m smooth and don’t like anyone. Even if I do, I don’t care and ignore it.
Even if I know it, that I like you, I still just push it away.
You’re picture floats in my mind all the time. It’s even too crazy to believe. When I try to think, you’re there, taking my thoughts away from me, intruding my life.
So, all I gotta say now is…
Can you just help me?
Can you help me stop, because I don’t think I can…
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Wow, I had to read this a few times. Is that good or bad?
Just kidding.
Anyways, this piece was really good. I liked how it was short, sweet, and to the point. And actually, it sounds a lot like what a bunch of teenagers seem to be going through. They like someone, but they're in denial. That sort of thing. Anyways, I liked it a lot. Nice job!
All I can think to say is... WOW! It's so true, it's scary! I could really relate to these emotions in the character's head. Love can be such a crazy thing; something we can try to hide, something we love to tell or even something we are still trying to understand. I look forward to reading more storys like this.
Keep writing and good luck
JJxVoodo
I really loved this, it was short but conveyed a lot of feeling. Even though the topic is a little overused you used the topic in a diffrent way, which is good. I absoultely loved it, keep up the good work.
Okay, so here we go. Honesty, I was a tad bored. The concept has been done over and over. It's overused. You're writing is actually pretty good but I couldn't really get intrested because I felt like I had read it before. I was kept your same style however I was get some new ideas. If you are going to stick to cliches, make it intresting. Give it a twist. Overall, just be careful about your subject pick, and be more creative. Good Luck!
Beautiful. It's simple yet sweet and gets your point across. I love it! And I think there are plenty of people that can relate. I think this is meant to be simple and nothing needs to be changed about it detail wise.
Amazing. I really like this a lot. Hope to read more of your work haha. Good luck and Happy Writing!!! Keep up the good writing. I can't really find anything wrong with this at all. I could see the struggle in this person and that makes me feel good haha. Means even though I'm tired I can still enjoy reading other's works haha.
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