Published September 28, 2009
These are just two (very short) random pieces I came up with during one of my many sleepless nights, I thought I would share them as entertainment pieces for all. Here is the first:
The Zombie With Wings.
I came across some wings today. I dont know what kind of bird they must have belonged to but I sewed them to my back anyway.
You said I made a beautiful angel. I asked how a rotting corpse could be anything other then dead ? You smiled and replied so calmly: "Why its the unobtainable goals we seek to overcome that make us truly alive."
And so when you are dead and gone, I'll soar and each downward stroke will bring me closer to you in paradise because my goal was always to be with you forever
The last:
Mr. Spoonman and Little Miss Teapot have a Conversation (part two).
Mr. Spoonman's hand descended and landed atop Little Miss Teapots head.
"Tell me my dear Teapot girl, but what do you make of these crude implements?"
"Why they are of metal Mr. Spoonman. Are these not little apple knifes? For the slicing of little apples and the like?"
"Oh my, what a fine head you have attached to your shoulders. Indeed my dear they are and of whose do they belong?"
"But of course they belong to Sir Knife?"
"Yes indeed they do. Crude and violent implements made by a man so deranged he'd have you believe it necessary to cut up the most innocent of fruits."
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Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!
Anyway let's get right to it,
Well to be honest I wasn't entirely certain what exactly to expect when it came to a story with this sort of title, but I don't think I ever quite expected something that is as put together and deep as this one managed to be here. You really tap into some interesting places with these thoughts. With the idea of this being more than a zombie but some sort of lost soul left abandoned and using the wings are more than just a way to have a flying zombie ends up with us receiving this powerful little message and honestly at the end I'm just left wanting to know so much more.
Hmm this is an entirely different flavor of story here. Once again given the name you expect something a little more simple and perhaps fun but instead we have ourselves something that's more of a serious topic although in this case its serious in a more cartoony sense with the way we have fruits being cut considered some sort of crime. It creates a different vibe for sure but once again its a lovely little piece that really hits an interesting note here that you don't quite expect at first.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
Oh thanks for pointing that out, I thought perhaps it might have been but wasn't too sure.
*changes it*
This was quaint but i really, really liked it. One thing
Good quote and definetely not a question. But it's "overcome." one word. It's a nasty-looking word, i know. But it's real.
And that's it. Great job.
Am glad you enjoyed them, they were just little random things.
The Zombie one is my fav as well and is just something that came to my mind. And yes the: "Why its the unobtainable goals we seek to over come that make us truly alive." It makes more sense if you read it out loud, its not meant to be a question but I see what you mean.
And as for Mr Spoonman and Little Miss Teapot there are plenty of convo's between them. I randomly come up with their dialogue, however Part one is missing and I cannot seem to find where it's gotten to.
Thanks for the compliments <3
Okay: Your title grabbed me from the getgo. I can see now you were just sort of throwing in words involved in your stories, but it really hooked me from the beginning. I was all like "Whoa... Must read."
I loved these. They were short. They were random. And yet they were so good. It's like flash fiction. Seriously, I wasn't sure what I was expecting and I'm still not sure exactly what to make of them, but I really really love them.
The "Zombie" was my favorite of the two, just because it had such a strange premise and a neat little paradox, as it were. I did like the dialogue of the "Teapot" story though. It seemed so quaint and absurd, like something out of Lewis Carrol.
This seems to be a question, so I'd put a question mark at the end. If it's sort of a rhetorical "why", then I'd rewrite the sentence as such:
Why, it's the unobtainable goals we seek to over come that make us truly alive.
Is there a part one?
Very, very nice. Loved it.
*thumbs up*
~GryphonFledgling