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Hi, my name's Narniafreak. I guess I'll critique your story as best as I can. Mainly there are little errors that Kara already pointed out, so fix those. Good job describing the setting of the place, I could really picture it. Quick question: Is this another world completely, or is it Earth in future events? The answer might determine where you want to put it in, fantasy or science fiction. The action was intense and kept me reading so good job on that. At the beginning when "they" are reporting in or whatever, you could maybe say who is talking. I get the gist that it's soldiers or something but not exactly sure who. The mind reading/probbing thing was very creative. I would love to read more of this story and find out what happens with Seven and the little girls and whatever else. Keep up the good work and keep writing. Hope this helped.

-Narniafreak

Hi Nightmares! You're new, aren't you? I'm Kara, nice to meet you. ^^

It's been a while since I've come to YWS, so I might be rusty at this but here goes nothing!

The buildings shifted past; grey skeletons against a black backdrop.

Harsh lights glinted in the upper parts of the towering skyscrapers, while the ground levels stood open to the elements

piles of human bodies lay asleep on the cement trying to beat the summer heat.

He had no intention of using the weapon unless he had to something that became increasingly likely the longer he stayed in this city.

Two black clad figures moved silently along the street, their helmeted heads sweeping the length of it searching for anything that may be out of place.

His heading your way alpha team, stand down!

I should start to see it shortly.

The word bounced off the walls stirring a few people awake.

“Who are you helping, are their more of you?”