Dreamer and dreams.

I really liked this. Dreams are always an interesting subject for writers for they're so generally shared, but so different for each individual. I liked the way your portrayed dreams as an "unambiguous anxiety." I sometimes feel like my dreams are the moments in my life unlived- experiences that are not forehadowing to my future but more so preluding to what we unconciously seek. I love how you said a dreamer is a haunter, but being haunted with it. Your writing flows very well. Keep writing!

Woah. Nice little poem. I like the way you descirbed dreams as sort of a paradox in the last four lines. I also like how you turned a dream into something to be "painted back", thus running with the underlying theory that a dream's potency is determined by the dreamer themself, who could be anyone. Nicely done.

Hey nightwalker!
I'm hanorah and ill be reviewing your poem today xD.

First of all, nice poem, I really enjoyed it!!

Ok about the picture and people saying it doesn't go with the poem, honestly I think you should leave it there.

Down to business..

'Dream can always be beautiful' > I think you meant 'dreams' not 'dream'.

Next, the line 'unaccomplished dreams is an unambiguous anxiety' doesn't sound right. Change the 'is' into 'are'.

'A dreamer might be a ghost' would sound better if you said ' a dreamer may be a ghost'.

I hope this review was helpful overall, great poem!Well done!
~keep writing

Hello there. I like this poem it's very nice but I don't think the picture describes it. Unless you're using it to describe the first line for beauty, if so then ignore my earlier comment. ^o^'
Nice simile in the second line it starts the dreamlike feel of the poem.

Leo here to review!!!

First of all, the picture reminds me of the story of pandora opening the box, which she was not supposed to...

Coming to your poem, Good and simple, "but" some mistakes to turn-off the flavour of the poem...

"Dream can be always beautiful," I think it will be good if you write "dreams" instead of dream...it sounds a bit out of place...if you want it that way, then add "a" before dream, like

"A dream can always be beautiful," "But" i would like you to make it "dreams"

2. "Dream can be always beautiful,

lovely like the sun beam, rises behind the mountains

and when it embedded,world sunk in darkness."

These lines have an awkward essence when read...why don't you write it in the simple present (better say keep it) instead of writing it in the past tense..It doesn't help to the poem...

Better would be,

"Dreams can be always beautiful,

lovely like the sun beam, rising behind the mountains

and when it is embedded, the world sink in darkness."

3. "Unaccomplished dreams is an unambiguous anxiety,"

It should be dreams "are" not "is"....

This automatically will make the next line read in this way,

"fading like an old wall, covered by a moss green"

4. "and when it passed by time,someone will paint it back somehow."

Here, i would like you to change this line, "and when it passed by time"....It adds to the distaste for the poem...(please no offence)

try to change it into something more good, and that too in the present tense...

Nothing else to say...Hope my review turns out to be fruitful for you...

Thank you:-)