Published July 5, 2005
FOREVER FRIENDS!!!
Forever Friends
you'r my friend and that is true,
but the gift was given from me to you.
we went thru moments that were good and bad,
even moments that were happy and sad.
you suported me when i was in tears,
we stuck together when we were in fear,
its really sad that it had to be this way,
but it has reached its very last day.
miles away cant keep us apart,
'cause you'll always be in my heart
By Nicola Bruce
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Yeah, very forced, with absolutely no rhythm. Very bland, and uninteresting.
Wait, I don't get it... "It has reached it's very last day," but, "Miles away can't keep us apart"? It seemed really forced, and the rhythm was really messed up. It was pretty cute though. I'm sure it made your friend happy ^_^
<3
Angel xx