Laid broken on the floor,
Everything I was,
Gone.
You walked away and I cannot breathe,
Your shadow looming over me wherever I go,
stopping me from living,
How can I live without you?
My love,
I see your footsteps everywhere I go,
I cannot escape you,
You left marks on everything of mine and all I can see is you.
How can I move on?
You are my life and without you I am lost.
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Hey there, welcome to YWS
This is a really nice poem, short, but sweet
I really like the lines:
"I see your footsteps everywhere I go,
I cannot escape you"
As if the person is being haunted by his lost love.
I really don't have any thing bad to say, except that personally I like a good rhyme scheme
It also might be cleaner to break this up into multiple stanzas
Once again, great work, and keep writing!
~Hadj
Sunshine here to review...
I'm guessing it's about someone in love with someone they can't be with anymore. It's sorta sweet and has a deep meaning. I don't have any nitpicks, but good job! 
I probably would have a better review than this, but I'm kind of currently in school, actually I'm in my study and with the classical music playing I can't read straight. But still, this is very good, I look forward to your future works 
keep on writing! 
I thought this was very good, in fact I love this.