Underneath the cliche

by NerdBurga

Published May 24, 2013

12+ Mature Content

In Poetry

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Like north and south they came together,
Drawn through the pull of polar opposites.
Him with the tattoo and the interest in obscene,
Her with the shades of darkness she never wanted seen.

He was saving for a new bike,
The kind that roared right down the road.
She was after a shiny dress,
The likes of which she'd never owned.

Yet it was he who was the smitten one,
He promised her the world, and wanted to deliver.
She was the one who held back, she didn't want it.
Sure it would wither under her vile touch.

Yet he gave it a go, and she wanted to try,
And it slowly turned into love.
But the more the wonder appeared in his eyes,
The more she thought she saw hate and disgust.

The rejection was swift, but it was full of hurt,
And fiction she saw as truth.
He only saw lies, he only saw hurt,
And the razor she kept under her pillow.

It was her, in the end, who brought the end;
So sure it was only further down the track.
And it was he who struggled to understand,
But he never did bother coming back.

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Catnip
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Catnip wrote a review Review · May 26, 2013

Hiya Nerdburger =^-^= Happy review day! (and yayyyy for the Tsunami Tyrants!) Firstly, I tell everyone this: I adore poetry and always take time to dissect them pretty vigilantly, so feel free to ask me to review your work at any time ^-^
Anyhoo, Nippy is here to give you a review c:
I can’t say much, other than it was a really nice piece. It coursed along well and wasn’t broken up or jerky at all. This is simply lovely and I admire your skill for crafting it together. Well done, keep writing, and do your best!
~Catnip~

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MindBlown
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MindBlown wrote a review Review · May 24, 2013

Nerdburga, thus was a great poem. It was never very choppy and flowed well. The format of this poem was great and everything was written correctly. Punctuation and capitalization were consistent throughout the poem. It was easy and enjoyable to read. I hope to see more soon.




~MindBlown



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