Published February 19, 2011
Just so you know, this isn't from personal experience, I just made it up. Hope it's ok 
They call you playa, I call you scum
And lucky for me, you're pretty damn dumb
You lead me on, use all of that charm
But then I realise you'll bring nothing but harm
I love to talk and listen to you
But nothing you say is ever true
I'm feeling lonely, suddenly you're there
But you're too eager, like a starving bear
You'd have the potential to leave me with a burn
If only you smartened up learned
That I, your prey, am smarter then you
You're just a dumb playa, and I've better things to do
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haha Ive been across one of them before and ur poem is right (:
In the end you wake up to reality
well just one problem the rhyming seems a little forced but yeah you cant
really change that, soo
other than that, really good
It's ok. I feel somehow that the rhyming is excessive and maybe you might consider adding in an extra line from a between the words that rhyme to create a sort of balance. It is a good poem off the top of your head but it just needs a tad bit more polishing up and voi la it will be extremely good.