Published February 14, 2011
I haven’t seen you since june,
I remember our fatal kiss under the moon,
My love for you was too great,
But now, it’s too late.
I wish, I could see your face once more,
I wish, that things could be like before,
All these rhymes I write,
You still stay far out of my sight.
I live on hope,
Even when it get’s really hard to cope,
That we’ll be together someday,
And To do that I’ll find a way.
I just want you to know,
That I miss you so,
So much, that I’ll do anything for you,
Bescause my love for you is true.
So this valentine,
All I wish is for you is to be mine.
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I liked this. Some of the words seemed a bit forced, let it flow a bit more. This was really good, it reminded me of a friend and his relationship. Speaking of I thought that the poem held a bit of desperation (not in the way it was written but in the way on how you wanted people to see it) just wondering if I'm right.
Wow! I really liked this. It's really expressive, and I can relate to your feelings. On Valentine's Day, many of us were feeling that way, and I'm happy you put it into words, so thanks! Just one suggestion I can make is to edit just a bit, there were a couple grammatical errors, but besides that, This Valentine was good.
I really like it, but you do have some spelling errors which really bug me, so please just fix that and it'd be fine. Other than that, I liked it. I usually don't like rhyming (even though my poems sometimes do) but I liked it anyway. It kind of added a certain charm to it. So good job!