I <3 the real verison of this song and i <3 jacob so i thought "Why not combine the 2?" Enjoy......
Bella's roamin around
always huntin down her vampire boy
but we all know that she just stays
for his alloys
So really she don't deserve jacob
So really she don't deserve jacob
A boy like him
with all his warmth and his tattoo
when you're together in this weather
you won't feel blue
So really she don't deserve Jacob
So really she don't deserve Jacob
A boy like him
Off in the night
Bella tries to sleep but you hear her scream
But when she's with him, she's ok, she can still dream
We hope he's gonna make her notice
We hope he's gonna make her notice
That he's the best
That he's the best
That he's the best, we love him
That he's the best
That he's the best
That he's the best, we love him
That he's the best
That he's the best
That he's the best, we love him
That he's the best
That he's the best
That he's the best, we love him
I've been roamin around
forever wishing now that he chose me
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Hey Natibabes97!
This was amusing. Though, I feel like it isn't formatted right for lyrics. It should be seperated into verses, choruses, etc. This doesn't look like a parody to the full song, since it's pretty short, so it probably doesn't matter as much. Just a future reference sort of thing.
Another thing, there's virtualy no end-line punctuation. Even though they are lyrics, they are considred poetry and sentences and words and should still be grammatically correct. So periods, commas, etc should be at the end of the lines when they need to be.
Lastly:
On the elipses (the dots): to be correct, there are only three dots.
This is a writing site, and we pride ourselves on using appropriate grammer in and out of our fiction. You're new, so it'll take a bit of getting used to. Just thought I'd point it out.
Good job, and keep writing!
-Lauren-
This was god but sopster what do you mean used to
This is good! I love Kings Of Leon and used to love Twilight. All the lyrics fit too!
haha, coolio! I've never ehard the real song but your lyrics are totally true. Bella's such an air head. Jacob's cute. I'm not a big fan of Twilight but i ain't gonna rain on your parade! Great job.
Peace!
~*~fairgirl~*~