Pregnancy is to ear infection;
Both take a miniscule of bacteria
Once inplanted, causes panic and harm.
Can be solved with a pill if taken soon enough-
Yet one is easier to tell the boyfriend.
Orgasm is to sneeze;
Both amount in wonderful tntion,
There are waves of pleasure,
Everyone makes their own sound once released.
One wouldn't mind another afterwards-
Yet you can fake either.
Breasts are to poetry;
Both are incredibly unnecessary.
Although entirely fun to own.
They can get you in all kinds of trouble
And just the same make you friends-
Yet neither should be used at the same time.
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It made for interesting reading. But I have to say that the use of the word "solved" in line four, really killed it for me. If that's the way you view pregnancy, then that's okay, but for me, I found it highly offensive.
And I really didn't understand the comparison of an orgasm to a sneeze. I've never gotten pleasure out of a sneeze.
And I agree with Triona... you probably want to up the rating on this to an "R"
I liked it (except for the "Can be solved with a pill if taken soon enough" part which is dark and may upset some people)!
Completely bizare but interesting! Really weird metaphors. I think you should place a rating of R on it though.
Just a question however - How on earth can breasts "make you friends""