Red Light, Blue Light

Ptolemy is my lover,
Roy G Biv stole my virginity.
Strike me with your gamma rays-
Whisper something revolutionary.

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xanthan gum
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This was beautiful as it is, but I must agree - if only you would write more.

The color of ROY G BIV hurt my eyes. just saying hha...

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LamaLama
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All of your pieces are overwhelmingly short. They might be worthwhile if you actually took them and did something with them before posting them. This starts, and then it ends. Poems are no different from prose in that there should always be a beginning a middle and an end. You have none of these. I understand you're humor, but I think you should work more on developing something rather than just spating these short little bits out.



“Hope” is the thing with feathers - That perches in the soul - And sings the tune without the words - And never stops - at all -
— Emily Dickinson